Winds of November

Winds of November

A Poem by Fran Marie
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Ae Feislighe Form

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Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn
Leaf limb's,bare bough surrender
succumb to Nature's bottom

Crying Rains,sweep demanding
November's heavy downpours
Fall reigns,its fate, commanding
appearing dead,yet, endures

A Sleeping Moon regresses
undying in cold starkness
November's sky~depresses
rendering life to darkness

Winking Stars spread, diffusing
growing dim,then fade away
denied star light, confusing
'Tis what November displays

A Smiling Sun disappears
to a distant dark expanse
gray sky,sighs,and reappears
as November's winds still dance


© 2009 Fran Marie



Author's Note

  Fran Marie
Ae Freislighe

Each line of the Ae Freislighe has seven syllables, with lines
one and three ending in triple rhymes and two and four with
double rhymes. The poem must also end as it began, either with
the first syllable, word, phrase, or line.


The Ae Freislighe is a quatrain stanza with a fixed rhyme scheme

xxxx(xxa)
xxxxx(xb)
xxxx(xxa)
xxxxx(xb)

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Fran! This is beautiful!! Absolutely beautiful! Perfect rhythm and rhyme scheme! Oustanding! :D My favorite stanza is:

A Smiling Sun disappears
to a distant dark expanse
gray sky,sighs,and reappears
as November's winds still dance

Incredible!!! :D



Posted 10 Years Ago


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Being November my absolute favourite month first of all, I love the tittle! Then this amazing shower of beautiful words captivated my mind greatly.Excellent poem and the lovely picture makes it perfect!

Well done, Fran :-)))

Posted 2 Months Ago


There is something so mysterious about autumn, and November's awakening. The darkness falls with a chilled mist and everything begins to fall into a trance. Your poetic sighs speak this over us so well.

Posted 2 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

2 Months Ago

Thanka dear Craig for the great review on my poetry. I so appreciate..
well that's November no doubt ..i use to live in SD and sunny skies are rare in the summer, let alone in the fall..and those winds never stop blowing ..just change direction .. had to read several times to "get into" the rhythm of this rhyming ...i do not understand how the form fits ...with the double and triple rhyming??? so kept looking for that ..once i gave up and just read it i was able to enjoy the painting .. i think the alliterations are spaced nicely and balanced ..Irish poetry is filled with them eh!? Fall is one of my favorite seasons and here in the Ozarks the skies are not so bleak and the threats of winter not nearly so demanding ... the poem rather dark for glorious fall ...a creative and unique approach ... difficult form with syntax always a challenge ...almost precludes sticking to it ;) beautiful imagery as November disrobes the trees ..not sure what her "bottom" is .. i took it as bottoming out ..?
i think your first and last verses are the strong ones in this ..did you have to work and re-work many times? ;)
E.

Posted 2 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

2 Months Ago

Thanks E. So much for reading..the triple rhyming are in lines one and three ending words in those .. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

ahhhh syllables .. as if getting things down is not hard enough eh!? i was thinking rhyme ..where o .. read more
  Fran Marie

2 Months Ago

Lol
. Not a problem.. some forms are quite difficult to understsnd.. thanks agsin my friend... read more
Amazing!

I haven't written rhyme for forever . this gem inspires.


Posted 2 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

2 Months Ago

Thanks so vey much..
I've lost my appetite for doing structured poems, but I very much admire those who do a great job as you've done! Good autumn imagery & interesting rhymes thru-out. Most of all, I love the dynamic modifiers you use to describe each various aspects of nature (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

2 Months Ago

Thanks Margie so very much appreciated..😀
What a wordsnith you are! In spite of the technalities involved.. or maybe because of them, your November "inds are beautifully visual.

(Had to re.read this expert lesson)

Posted 3 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

3 Months Ago

Thanks emmajoy.. always appreciate your reviews on my poetry
emmajoy

3 Months Ago

And the same in reverse. Have a happy weekend.
Great to see a master working her craft. Simply beautiful.

Excellent Read

Matthew

Posted 3 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

3 Months Ago

Thanks Matthew.. so much appreciated
I loved how you used the language. So alive and beautiful dear Fran.
"Winking Stars spread, diffusing
growing dim,then fade away
denied star light, confusing
'Tis what November displays "
I liked the complete poem. The above lines stood out to me. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

3 Months Ago

Thanks John.. so vey much aapprciate your kind words
Coyote Poetry

3 Months Ago

I love your work and you are welcome.
Great lyrical write, you conveyed the changing season perfectly. I feel it..

Posted 1 Year Ago


Cleverly constructed and a picturesque depiction of November's bleak disrobing. The Crying, Dancing, Sleeping etc were neatly fed into the scenes, though I must say 'Nature's bottom' was a show-stopper!
You handle words so well.

Posted 1 Year Ago



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