Winds of November

Winds of November

A Poem by Fran Marie
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Ae Feislighe Form

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Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn
Leaf limb's,bare bough surrender
succumb to Nature's bottom

Crying Rains,sweep demanding
November's heavy downpours
Fall reigns,its fate, commanding
appearing dead,yet, endures

A Sleeping Moon regresses
undying in cold starkness
November's sky~depresses
rendering life to darkness

Winking Stars spread, diffusing
growing dim,then fade away
denied star light, confusing
'Tis what November displays

A Smiling Sun disappears
to a distant dark expanse
gray sky,sighs,and reappears
as November's winds still dance


© 2009 Fran Marie



Author's Note

  Fran Marie
Ae Freislighe

Each line of the Ae Freislighe has seven syllables, with lines
one and three ending in triple rhymes and two and four with
double rhymes. The poem must also end as it began, either with
the first syllable, word, phrase, or line.


The Ae Freislighe is a quatrain stanza with a fixed rhyme scheme

xxxx(xxa)
xxxxx(xb)
xxxx(xxa)
xxxxx(xb)

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Fran! This is beautiful!! Absolutely beautiful! Perfect rhythm and rhyme scheme! Oustanding! :D My favorite stanza is:

A Smiling Sun disappears
to a distant dark expanse
gray sky,sighs,and reappears
as November's winds still dance

Incredible!!! :D



Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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I've lost my appetite for doing structured poems, but I very much admire those who do a great job as you've done! Good autumn imagery & interesting rhymes thru-out. Most of all, I love the dynamic modifiers you use to describe each various aspects of nature (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Week Ago


What a wordsnith you are! In spite of the technalities involved.. or maybe because of them, your November "inds are beautifully visual.

(Had to re.read this expert lesson)

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Week Ago

Thanks emmajoy.. always appreciate your reviews on my poetry
emmajoy

1 Week Ago

And the same in reverse. Have a happy weekend.
Great to see a master working her craft. Simply beautiful.

Excellent Read

Matthew

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


  Fran Marie

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks Matthew.. so much appreciated
I loved how you used the language. So alive and beautiful dear Fran.
"Winking Stars spread, diffusing
growing dim,then fade away
denied star light, confusing
'Tis what November displays "
I liked the complete poem. The above lines stood out to me. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


  Fran Marie

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks John.. so vey much aapprciate your kind words
Coyote Poetry

1 Week Ago

I love your work and you are welcome.
Great lyrical write, you conveyed the changing season perfectly. I feel it..

Posted 12 Months Ago


Cleverly constructed and a picturesque depiction of November's bleak disrobing. The Crying, Dancing, Sleeping etc were neatly fed into the scenes, though I must say 'Nature's bottom' was a show-stopper!
You handle words so well.

Posted 1 Year Ago


superb composition and fantastic imagery! well done! :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

2 Years Ago

Thanks so much dear friend,so appreciated..
Indra Neil

2 Years Ago

u r most welcome! :)
A work of art...signifies the immortality of nature. Beautiful.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Truly a beautiful poem about autumn, it captures the feeling that November's starkness evokes, when the sky cries rain and the wind strips the trees.
To me it conveys a feeling of forlornness, as November takes all signs of summer's life, that contrasts with the liveliness of the dancing wind.
The descriptions are stunning and overall it is an awesome poem.
I also like the rhyme scheme and the flow of it.
You did an amazing job here!

Posted 5 Years Ago


I agree with all the other comments: superb writing and I love this new form you've introduced here! I must try it. Thanks for sharing your wonderful skills with us!

Dee

Posted 6 Years Ago



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