Winds of November

Winds of November

A Poem by Fran Marie
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Ae Feislighe Form

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Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn
Leaf limb's,bare bough surrender
succumb to Nature's bottom

Crying Rains,sweep demanding
November's heavy downpours
Fall reigns,its fate, commanding
appearing dead,yet, endures

A Sleeping Moon regresses
undying in cold starkness
November's sky~depresses
rendering life to darkness

Winking Stars spread, diffusing
growing dim,then fade away
denied star light, confusing
'Tis what November displays

A Smiling Sun disappears
to a distant dark expanse
gray sky,sighs,and reappears
as November's winds still dance


© 2009 Fran Marie



Author's Note

  Fran Marie
Ae Freislighe

Each line of the Ae Freislighe has seven syllables, with lines
one and three ending in triple rhymes and two and four with
double rhymes. The poem must also end as it began, either with
the first syllable, word, phrase, or line.


The Ae Freislighe is a quatrain stanza with a fixed rhyme scheme

xxxx(xxa)
xxxxx(xb)
xxxx(xxa)
xxxxx(xb)

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well that's November no doubt ..i use to live in SD and sunny skies are rare in the summer, let alone in the fall..and those winds never stop blowing ..just change direction .. had to read several times to "get into" the rhythm of this rhyming ...i do not understand how the form fits ...with the double and triple rhyming??? so kept looking for that ..once i gave up and just read it i was able to enjoy the painting .. i think the alliterations are spaced nicely and balanced ..Irish poetry is filled with them eh!? Fall is one of my favorite seasons and here in the Ozarks the skies are not so bleak and the threats of winter not nearly so demanding ... the poem rather dark for glorious fall ...a creative and unique approach ... difficult form with syntax always a challenge ...almost precludes sticking to it ;) beautiful imagery as November disrobes the trees ..not sure what her "bottom" is .. i took it as bottoming out ..?
i think your first and last verses are the strong ones in this ..did you have to work and re-work many times? ;)
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

Thanks E. So much for reading..the triple rhyming are in lines one and three ending words in those .. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

ahhhh syllables .. as if getting things down is not hard enough eh!? i was thinking rhyme ..where o .. read more
  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

Lol
. Not a problem.. some forms are quite difficult to understsnd.. thanks agsin my friend... read more



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Nicely done, Fran, but then your work always is.

Posted 1 Week Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Week Ago

Thanks Nolo..so very much appreciated..
Fran Marie you are describing a tamed version of today here on the NW coast of England with SW Scotland twenty miles across the bay (Solway Firth)
The winds are not dancing > rushing; biting; cold >> Rain in buckets full each drop

So unlike when I saw the geese fly south awat from the cold to a place for winter sun and warmth >>>> Wish I could fly like a goose

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


  Fran Marie

2 Weeks Ago

Your November sounds more blustery indeed..
Thanks so vey much WR for reviewing my poetry
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Wild Rose

2 Weeks Ago

Seasonal gales hope we dont get them over Christmas
Lost power one year just as everything w.. read more
Fran, what amazing colours of descriptive images held within this dancing lightscape of a magical poem. That is captivating and enthralling to read and take on board.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


  Fran Marie

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks Dawn so very much appreciate your kind words on my poetry;
A perfect poem to witness with the mind's imagination. The words guided, I beheld the sights.

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


  Fran Marie

4 Weeks Ago

Thanks 33.. so very much appreciated
Quite an accomplished piece that made it seem formless. Graceful and full beautiful visuals and phrasing. November comes, yes she does. Loved it Fran!!!!

Posted 1 Month Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

Hi Crowley..thanks so vey much for the visit and review..ever so appreciated;
I don't understand any of that technical talk, but I have been writing poetry for half a century, and I know a good poem when I read one.
Yours here is a fine one!
The first verse:

Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn
Leaf limb's,bare bough surrender
succumb to Nature's bottom

Just lovely, and the imagery here is...impeccable.
Beautiful write, Fran!

Posted 1 Month Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

Thanks Angel for your kind words on this poem..I do appreciate it so. ..
Absolutely beautiful. I am again reminded of fall and its drastic change from summer. As we watch nature's rebirth cycle every season, your poem is like a metaphor for that. And the lines: Fall reigns,its fate, commanding appearing dead,yet, endures. Show me that beauty regarding the constant fight between death and life. Great job!


Posted 1 Month Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

Thanks A.E.so very much for your kind review .I so appreciate it..
the form is new to me, the poem itself is lovely.
November has never been my favourite, so cold and wet around here and signs of winter.

Posted 1 Month Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

Thanks Ana so much appreciate your reading and review of my poetry
I love November from the dressed down trees to the leaves skirting through the wind.
You are a master of taking the reader with you.

Posted 1 Month Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

Thanks Cherrie..so much appreciate your kind words on my poetry..
A fine tribute to November Winds, Fran. They sweep in with the cold, moist, greyness of winter upon their wings. Mere players in this cyclic act of Nature, they do their depressing bit, albeit dancing. The structure, the rhyming and the flow of the poem are just great. I enjoyed this read so much.

Posted 1 Month Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

Thanks Dhara..so very much..glad you enjoyed;
Dhara_Ditzy Kat

1 Month Ago

You are welcome Fran!

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