Winter's Slumber

Winter's Slumber

A Poem by Fran Marie
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Grieving/Death

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In Winter's Slumber

'A violet
by a mossy stone'
so gentle
now you sleep
I cannot grasp
the stars so cold
and no more can i weep

so delicate
my violet dear
life's battles
have taken you under
So rest in peace
A sleep, so deep
in Winter's slumber

softly the butterflies
fluttered in Summer
kissing new,another day
then Aurtumn's breeze
blew cool, the winds
taking you away

but, oh, sweet Violet
you were Spring to me
so happy,warm and gay
full of life and magic dance
'til you went away

my violet now lies 'neath
death's tombstone
gathering moss new and green
and I still can't reach
the cold distant stars
and 'Tis I, who is
left alone, to dream



© 2008 Fran Marie



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… the acceptance of loss in quiet solitude marks this verse … the beautifully affectionate endearment “my violet” … brings to life an affection poignant and sincere … intense and overwhelming … “I cannot grasp the stars so cold” … is extremely intricate and yet simple poetry … “a sleep, so deep, in Winter’s slumber” … is again an amazing expression of that permanent slumber we all know is death … “the winds taking you away” … is a moving and mesmerizing expression … the reference to seasons and the comparison with life expressing ravishing yet simple profundity with elegance … “you were Spring to me” … is a breathtakingly beautiful expression and absolutely unforgettable … this last stanza is such an intense expression of sadness that it moves one beyond measure … the last line especially is sheer genius … and brings out the pain and isolation … while at the same time … the inevitability of dreams … it is no doubt excruciatingly painful to dream after a loved one has gone forever …


my violet now lies 'neath
death's tombstone
gathering moss new and green
and I still can't reach
the cold distant stars
and 'Tis I, who is
left alone, to dream

... a beautifully written poem … it’s all heart … pure and pristine … and it just flows and flows with a beautiful rhythm … exceptionally good rhyming …

(serah)
(editor, the fourth dimension blog)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This a beautiful poem, beautiful language and soft tones within the sad truths of the poem. Loved it!

Posted 1 Year Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

thamks so much, I appreciate it..
This is a poem filled with tremendous amounts of grief and all those emotions that come with the loss of losing someone. I love the use of the season to explain the passing of time. This piece pulls at heart strings.

Posted 4 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

4 Years Ago

thanks kristina so very much;
Poetic Beauty

4 Years Ago

You are more than welcome.
"my violet now lies 'neath
death's tombstone
gathering moss new and green
and I still can't reach
the cold distant stars
and 'Tis I, who is
left alone, to dream "

This poem was so poignant, heartbreaking, and dreamy. Poignant because there is the ever-present feeling of the "violet" being underneath the ground. Heartbreaking because the person "can't reach the cold distant stars" and "is left alone, to dream." Dreamy because it seems distant yet so near, like the captured fragments of a dream near wakefulness. One can grasp some of the pieces but not the whole thing. I suppose the deepest loss feels distant yet near at the same time. One can hardly believe that it happened, yet it did.

Very deep and touching. I loved this!

Posted 4 Years Ago


E.V. Black

4 Years Ago

It's my pleasure! I enjoyed reading it.
  Fran Marie

4 Years Ago

it was written for a friend who lost her little girl 9yrs old to cancer, she ask me to write a poem.. read more
E.V. Black

4 Years Ago

How young! I'm sorry for such a loss. It must have been horrible to have lost her.
So beautifully written......Whisk

Posted 5 Years Ago


What a beautiful write!
I felt like I was from another time reading your poem it kept my attention throughout and the words you used to describe in Winters Slumber. Loved it!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Excellent Fran! I felt the cold, the deep apain of loss depicted here, grand write!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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… the acceptance of loss in quiet solitude marks this verse … the beautifully affectionate endearment “my violet” … brings to life an affection poignant and sincere … intense and overwhelming … “I cannot grasp the stars so cold” … is extremely intricate and yet simple poetry … “a sleep, so deep, in Winter’s slumber” … is again an amazing expression of that permanent slumber we all know is death … “the winds taking you away” … is a moving and mesmerizing expression … the reference to seasons and the comparison with life expressing ravishing yet simple profundity with elegance … “you were Spring to me” … is a breathtakingly beautiful expression and absolutely unforgettable … this last stanza is such an intense expression of sadness that it moves one beyond measure … the last line especially is sheer genius … and brings out the pain and isolation … while at the same time … the inevitability of dreams … it is no doubt excruciatingly painful to dream after a loved one has gone forever …


my violet now lies 'neath
death's tombstone
gathering moss new and green
and I still can't reach
the cold distant stars
and 'Tis I, who is
left alone, to dream

... a beautifully written poem … it’s all heart … pure and pristine … and it just flows and flows with a beautiful rhythm … exceptionally good rhyming …

(serah)
(editor, the fourth dimension blog)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Posted 7 Years Ago


Ah, gorgeous and beautifully expressed; the flower on the grave.

Thanks for entering in the Move Me contest!

~Rd

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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