Within the Wind

The spirit of a mysterious force
lies hidden within the wind
An essence, steering a dynamic course
attached to destiny's path of men

It's power reigns, wide and may be a deadly grave
one can only seek to be sheltered from the wind.
It's strength, unearths the soul so brave
and within the wind lies a destroying end

Ah, but then~can it be a wisp,
a gentle breeze at night?
with fragrance blowing thru~willow's trees
as lovers kiss 'neath pale moonlight.

No longer have I doubt
what lies within the wind
As tho~it is with fire's spark
It can be enemy or friend

As we seek shelter from the wind
it can also set our sprit soaring free
thru~this vast universe
its secret power rules men's destiny

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

I love the idea of all the things that can be captured on the wind. The imagery is stunning and the flow is easy to follow.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your great winning poem!

[vandana]

An apt description thats well written and in a subtle way brings out the essence of the word 'Destiny'. Good job :)

[Lady of the Ring]

that is EXACTLY what I've looking for. thanks for submitting

hi, little misspell, dinamic should be dynamic.

Good form, good use of words.

I like the insight and concept, and the contrast between good when good, destructive when bad idea.

Great piece

[Norma J. Jessee]

Ahhhhhh so beautiful and refreshing. This poem just seems to roll off ones tongue with no effort at all.
This is beautiful Fran.
I love it.
Into my favs it goes.

[Annalisa]

This was lovely, when it's read out loud it flows almost like a song and is very soothing. There were a few things that I thought I would mention though, first when you say "Within the Wind" in the beginign is that supposed to be a part of the poem or is it supposed to be the title? If it's a part of the poem then I think you should get rid of that line, it's uneccisary and in some ways takes away the srength of your first lines. If it's simply you repeating the title then I think it's unnecisary and distracting.

Secondly, because the language is very beautiful and consistent I had a hard time when you said "'neath" in the twelfth line, it just doesn't fit with the cadence of the rest of the poem, I would suggest going ahead and spelling out beneath.

And lastly towards the end you say "thru~this"... I don't like the "~"... it's just sorta strange.

But the poem was wonderful and all of my suggestions are stylistic things so they're not really that important. This was great. Good work.