July in The Park

Summer Sonnet

 

 

Beneath the clouds I lie in dreamy peace
birds sing summer's  lullabies high in trees
this July day breathes a warm subtle breeze
and the world's still here in balanced degrees
some children play on swings, 'neath July's sky
some run thru~grass,puppies nipping their shoes
and marshmallow clouds so slowly float by
if perhaps I'm dreaming, 'tis what I choose
Yes!, call me a dreamer 'adrift on clouds
let me have all the dreams which I'm allowed
July in the park, such delight lies
where dreams of a dreamer can't be denied

'Tis a dreamland beneath the clouds I lie
and a delicate breeze whispers no lies

Reviews

[Augustus]

It is a captivating photograph to begin with...one that makes you feel "Hey, I wanna be there"...As far as structure goes, there are metrical imperfections, but I have come to give them a secondary importance as compared to the poem's flow, in spite of having written structured verse for the most part myself.

The poem gives me an overall feel of peace, which is very important, because it strengthens the poem's association with the photograph and more importantly, carries the reader straight to the "park" which you have portrayed. M favorite line in the poem, was
"if perhaps i'm dreaming, 'tis what I choose"
There is a very classic feel to the poem, mostly because of the choice of structure and what can now be called 'archaic' phrases. Quite reminiscent of the romantics...
All in all, it leaves the reader quite satisfied. Thanks!

[Rose]

Very calm and breezy - plus my birthday is in July! I especially love the line "Yes! call me a dreamer 'adrift on clouds" it evokes whimsical, light-hearted imagery.

Great work!

[Weeping Willow]

This is great keep it up

[The Analog Kid]

July is the best month for dreaming to me. You captured this nicely:)

[Tina Kline]

Your words create a lovely and peaceful place. It sounds so wonderful just to be able to relax in a beautiful park and enjoy all that is going on...relax and dream. I really like this poem.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Enjoy your July in the park. I did, thanks to your wonderful poetry.
Thank you!

[Alex Caine]

I really like this; it takes me back to my childhood...before I became a stressed teenager :D
Very calming imagery, I enjoyed it very much.

[Deron Luis Anthony]

lol I like this poem personally because my birthday is in July. i kinda get that relaxing feeling from reading this and in the month of July. it's warm, i love the very last two lines the best.

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tis is a dreamland under the skies I visit there all the time!!!

[Liam]

I like the marshmallow clouds. Makes me hungry.