Mourning Rain

Mourning Rain

A Poem by Fran Marie
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Ovillejo Form

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Sitting in the dark all alone,

I'm home.

Pondering now what I'm to do?

Without you.

Called by God to heaven above

My love.
Swept away from me, my sweet dove.

My tears still fresh as morning rain
Love since you left this earthly plane
I'm home without you, my love.

© 2008 Fran Marie


Author's Note

  Fran Marie
The "ovillejo," an old Spanish verse form that means "tight
little bundle." "-ejo" is one of our blessed diminutives,
and "ovillo" means "tangled ball of yarn." The last line is
a "redondilla," a "little round" that collects all three of the
short lines. The rhyme scheme is established, but the meter is
at the poet's discretion, although in Spanish the longer lines
tend to be octosyllabic. ( octosyllabic: A line of verse
containing eight syllables)

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like how this piece comes together, nice work

Posted 9 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

9 Years Ago

thanks Mauricio, so very much;
I really like these lines, "...Called by God to heaven above
My love.
Swept away from me, my sweet dove..."
This verse is short, candid and melancholy. Filled with resignation also. Love the play on words in the title.

Posted 9 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

9 Years Ago

thanks, Lady Glitter, so much appreciated;
:) amazing. Great job on it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

9 Years Ago

thanks so much;
Wow this is wonderful, I like this. Quite the different style. I enjoyed it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Interesting little form this one. Loneliness described so eloquently and beautifully here.
Good job indeed Fran.

Thank you for submitting this little beauty to my contest and for Keeping
the Dream Alive! ~ Helena


Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Awwww, this is sad, but beautifully written.

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

This was sad and mournful, very evocative...great job.

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

A fine learning opportunity given in a small but lovely poem. As always well done.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

having once lost a close love I can really feel this one deep and relate so well... what a very sentimental write.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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  Fran Marie
Fran Marie

Paris, KY



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