Shadows

 

Within the shadows, evil lurks
 'tis when vamps spin their deadly curse
and Hell's black rain pelts midnight's earth
you'll fear the worse, the very worse

 

So savagely without remorse
they'll devour you,in bloodbath course
with blood red lips of draining force
you no recourse,you no recourse

 

Nothing you say will save your soul
these immortal ones take control
as they drink in shadow's dark glow
they covet blood, heart,mind and soul

 

Wild tales as these, you've surely read
unexplained horrors we all dread
so I plead,take heed,of what I said
be warned, beware or you'll be dead

 

 

Reviews

[Sean M. Addams]

oh wow Fran I really do love this one its nice to see someone else who have a talent for the dark too.... very amazing piece here... your writing always impresses me... fav lines...Within the shadows, evil lurks
'tis when vamps spin their deadly curse
and Hell's black rain pelts midnight's earth
you'll fear the worse, the very worse

................................................................ very nice !!!

So savagely without remorse
they'll devour you,in bloodbath course
with blood red lips of draining force
you no recourse,you no recourse

[mattavelli]

Hi, Fran, another great scary write! Two things jumped out at me while reading, which my brain demanded I point out to you.
1. "you'll fear the worse, the very worse" - my brain said...." Shouldnt it be worst?"...
2. "you no recourse,you no recourse" - brain said.... "you've" no recourse...

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Matt, so much appriciated...yes, I see what you mean..I will have to correct That..

[Sarah McConnaughey]

Another great poem! The picture is creepy, nice choice. ;) Amazing poem!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on this great winning poem!

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Fran,

Wonderfully spooky with good tempo and rhythm. And congratulations on your second place win in the "Shadow Cretures" contest.

Best regards,

Rick

[victoriamaggie]

cool!
im soo happy that someones already entered!
thanx

[Eric Cox]

Chillingly dark. Great poem!!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Very scary, but also very good. Great Write.

[MidNight]

great.rhyming.scheme,,Hell's.black.rain.pelts....how.divine....i.love.the.crucial.darkness.of.it.all,,,i.love.how.this.is.evidence.of.a.different..darker..mindset,,,and.dont.worry.after.this.write.i.will.BEWARE

_-mIDnIGHT

[Georgia Gypsy]

OOOOHHHHH!!!!! creepy-cool fun! just in time for halloween! I can see you love the dark, vampire genre as much as i do!....(the trouble for me is needing inspiration! maybe as the season starts to change it'll happen!)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Down right sine tingling dark and twisted with great rhythm and flow... This is certainly a great piece to sound off on Halloween, read it to those who dare come for treats.