`Spinning`

Dream your dream come with me to utopia where shangrila awaits with Venus Stir your senses to Saturn skies one step away from heaven' gate leading to Nirvana Dip your desires in Neptune's sea succomb to sublime bliss drenched in paradise Chart your course spinning thoughts in rapid force calming everchanging breathing winds of Mercury Summon the stars lighting the fires of the universe striking an iron sword conquering Mars Taste the temptation from dawn to dusk in morning's sun and magic night's moon sweet ambrosia on Earth Possess the power to break free those binds of restraint unleashing chains of Uranus Scheme the scene take the chance let luck be familiar in mystical themes of Jupiter Ride your rhythm savoring flavor of forbidden fruits where no rules apply you and I spinning in Pluto

Reviews

[Quaddeth]

The most substantial part of this poem for me is the freedom present, the ability to flow from one stanza to another with ease, it satisfies me to a certain extent. The use of the solar system alongside the freedom fuels it further and allows us to create an image of our utopian idealised vision of space, what is it to truly dream?

Thanks for the great read.

[FrancescaX]

Beautiful, just superb.

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the places you took me in your poem. The powerful description took me on a road trip into beautiful places. I like the flow of thoughts and the strong ending. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Devons]

This has a dancing, mantra-like rhythm and almost mesmeric feel to it. It works like a charm and is fundamentally poetic in nature. All the astrological themes and aspects associated with each planet are woven in with care and contemplation, and the overall effect is rewarding. Rather like a waltz through The Planets, demonstrating the naturally poetic nature of the cosmos. And indeed, all is Spinning.

[Clockwork]

I loved your combination of mythology with the planets and alliteration. It was a beautiful amalgam of sights and sounds.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Spinning, this piece took me into a freefalling feeling which was a good thing as was read I could visualize my inner feeling as they absorber into one like in meditation good read, excellent write.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

salacious imagery and sweetend words, well done, a good read.

[lovejulez03]

Beautiful piece of work! Breathtakingly intricate to the senses of the brain. I very much enjoyed this piece. You put it together well and the idea of it is simply great. :)

[TheFemininePad]

Definitely an interesting poem that you submitted for my unique and original writings contest. This was an interesting read, and it was very well written. The flow of the poem was very natural. This reminded me of how we still know very little about the universe that we live in. Great job!

[emmajoy]

A flight into spacial adventure, with beautiful phrasing. Wonderful!

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loved it Fran, using the solar system to chart this wonderful write!