The Naked Truth

The naked truth...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Your cuddly touch I have missed

Making body shiver the closer we got

As I anxiously waited for our lips to slowly mutter…

The loneliness raging through my body and mind

Craving the melodious sound of your voice

Naked I stand

Looking beyond my reach

Missing your lavish companionship…

 

Reviews

[Charles]

You certainly get your point across in this short poem... given contemporary mores, i'm not sure why you labelled it 'mature.' I do like the picture that accompanies the poem... makes me wonder which came first the picture or the poem - ekphrais one way or the other, I guess. I'm not much for inverted sentence structure, but this poem seems to be set up in that style, prompting me to read it a couple of times to get over my hangup and appreciate what you're saying. Nice job.

[Ellen Hammond]

The inverted sentences work extrememly well in this intensely passionate piece. Each word is so carefully chosen to convey the essence of the longing and loneliness caused by the absence of the object of such desire. The pairing of the words"lavish companionship" evokes thoughts of a love that goes way beyond just the physical pleasures. The picture really fits the poem. Great job!

[MagiCrystal]

I do... is it your quote ? lol

[Katseye]

Nothing to add to what's already said. Good work.

[charlotte talley]

you find the greastest pictures to go with your poems. good write.

[Alessander]

This is better than ur other piece - no souls or angels flying about lol

'Lonliness raging' is an interesting concept. Loneliness is typically potrayed in static ways, but here it's quite agressive.

'lavish companionship' is an interesting word coupling as well.

[Jamie S.]

Lavish companionship....nice touch ;)

[JordanMichelle]

I love it. I have been here before and I can relate quite well.. but regardless of that, it's a beautiful read. Smooth and flowing.. I love it. :)

[kayla garcia]

I don't just like it I love it

[Jackeline Lopez]

This is another beautiful poem and I really love the pictures you use for your poems. This piece is heart-felt!

[Bette]

i like this, your poetry always is full of unfulfilled desires and longing. well done!