Irresistible

What if you simple couldn't resit each other?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Here we are, brought together by fate

Allured by her exotic being

Feeling like our bodies are being pulled together by a magnetic force

Astonished by her angelic smile we move closer

Gently we kiss

Tightly we hold each other

Inhaling her Exquisite smell, I whisper

“Being so close to you illuminates my soul”

 

Reviews

[Ellen Hammond]

This is beautiful! The only thing I might suggest is changing the word 'SMELL' to "SCENT". But it could just be my mindset that smell is often associate with more of an unpleasant odor.

Other than that, I think this is hot and romantic. Well done!

[Zoe]

Great imagery. I pictured legs, arms all tangled together, lips mashed, intense happiness. lovely job, I felt myself swept away in these lovers' embrace.

[Emily Paige]

wow this is amazing i would give you higher then 100 if i could

[larryb]

Exquisite fragrance would maybe have been better but 100/100 anyways :)

[Frantzou]

Picture by:
http://ewart.deviantart.com

[Harley Ann]

hmm...

i dont know. its definitely more of an "in the moment" kind of thing lol. i do love the word choice, though, no matter how "abstract" others describe it. at least you know how to use these words and do so in a creative form, unlike a lot of writing i see today.

definitely not bad, although i know you can do better :)

[Cattie Rain (Angela)]

I really like this poem EXCEPT for the last line. For some reason, it didn't really end the poem as strongly or realistically as I would have liked. But the rest of it was beautiful. I love the strong feelings your writing gets across.

[Katseye]

As with all art some abstraction is a good thing. It allows the consumer, if you will, room to add their own mark on the piece. I like this very much.

[Ashley Black]

i think this is magnificent and not because it is sentimental but because its sexual and shows the desire without being graphic or killing the mood of the love between them. It's not hard to do that but you managed to manuever your words well enough to keep me feeling interested and pleased. I enjoyed it. Keep it up

[clemon73]

Great job. i like it.