No More Waiting

For so long I've waited...

"Yes!..."

"The softness of her skin so I crave

hoping my warm touch will cool off her seductive rage

 

with my eyes closed still I could see her heart beat reach its peak

unleashing the wild side of me so quick

 

Now lost into her world

A mystery beyond my control

but only her soul can make me whole..."

Reviews

[Charles]

Who wouldn't like this sort of poem - matched perfectly with the picture? You use two techniques here that are effective. First, the ... after the first word and after the last word, creating a sense of anticipation, of more to come. Second, the opening and closing quotation marks around the first word and also around the remainder of the poem, creating a sense of communication (not that anything profound has to be said). The assumption here might be that she said yes and he had more to say, or maybe one is an expletive by him and the other a more lengthy statement. I don't really understand the reason for the sentence inversions (like, the softness of her skin so I crave) but that seems to be part of your style, so be it. Good work

[Harley Ann]

hmm...well. the poem is sweet, in the sense that the last line almost makes it seem like the relationship isnt just a sexual one, but like he actually needs her. but it definitely expresses the lusty desire for her, too!

[Jasmarine]

Wow, the picture definately makes this poem and causes my heart to thunder against its cage. Good write :)

[Jamie S.]

Another steamy write, these are always fun to read. Puts alittle color in the cheeks, thanks for sharing :)

[Arasinya Adora]

I loved this one too! D: STOP MAKING ME REVIEW YOU! K well the poem goes very well with the pic, which is pretty smexy! The way you wrote the poem it sounded almost breathless, giving it a very sensual feel! Great job!

~Adora

[Bexfinch]

wow it makes your heart quicken and then supernova good job

[MagiCrystal]

Yes~ Yes ~ Yes ~

[Jennifer L. Brooks]

Another awesome write! It reminds me of a very hot fling I had before! This poem makes me feel his hand on my soft skin but his touch didn’t cool my seductive rage lol my heart left my chest each time we kissed and his wild side came out as with my ever wish. He stayed lost in me because I was too mysterious to let him go free and for awhile we did make each other whole but then came the time to let go. Ah, I LOVED THIS POEM! It sooooooooooooooo reminded me of such a seductive love and how I still miss it to this day. Keep it up! 100/100

[Haz]

No gimp masks? I feel a little disappointed: p

Brilliant thought and choice of words went into this, a really good piece, I like it’s length, short - like an outlet of breath. You have a talent for this kind of writing, your take on things is tasteful, yet honest enough for everyone to relate to. Masterfully done, this is something not everyone can pull off.

('unleashing the wild side of me so quick' Most women would find replacing 'so' with 'too' a little more apt :p)

[Ecros Lathes]

That is how most of us feel I love it

[Tina Kline]

This write is very good!