Strive

I don’t know any more  What to do  I don’t know anything  Not a clue  I’m sitting in this room here  Trying to face my fears there  I just don’t know how to live any more  Why do we work so hard Just to try  When all it dose is makes us cry  I’m sitting in this room here  Still trying to face my fears there  I just wish there was a place  A place were the sky is blue  A place that is true  A place that ill never give up on  A place that isn’t cruel  A place were no one rules  All I want is nothing more than that place

Reviews

[Nathan Hawks]

Keep working, my friend. the "here/there" and a few other nuances give me the hint that this poem could be turned inward or outward, and you would have written at the same. Mapping yourself out is a scary and fun challenge. I hope you enjoy the work, because we are much bigger on the inside ;-) Giving this a 65 because it seems very unfinished and rough-cut, but it's good material.

[5/13/2013]

yeah its not done.

[Bluefire]

Hm... really good. keep truckin!

[✖Lust✖]

Keep working on it.

You may be the next Taylor Swift

[5/13/2013]

but im a guy ._.

[✖Lust✖]

-blew her mind- Well I'm not going to say you're the next Justin Bieber am I.
:3

[5/13/2013]

No because i Hate beiber , well Taylor swift too

[✖Lust✖]

I hate them too the only reason why I said you could be the next taylor swift
1. I thought you were a girl
2. Every girl I know think I'm crazy for hating her

[5/13/2013]

your not crazy and if you are, when are you going to kill them? >.>

[✖Lust✖]

don't worry the plastic surgeons will kill them in their later years

[No Longer in use]

Interesting. I'm not the smartest when it comes to lyric but it sounds good to me.

[Dominique]

Keep on working. This song is so far amazing and it sounds wonderful when i sing it. Continue please.

[deepblue04]

this is soo good i like it!!!

[Freedom's Child]

This piece is awesome from beginning to end. Perfect flow with great emotion. I really got into this one. Great Job! "I'm sitting in this room here Still trying to face my fears there" these two lines were great to me, really touched me.

[Irvette Dauphine]

really nice poem and i like it.. :)

[Kuro]

really nice, love the ending. i read this then Soar and those two go together