Fear

Long narrow hall

 

Lights a flicker

 

Not alone

 

Stalking eyes

 

Began to panic

 

Shadows grab

 

Floor stained red

 

Now in bed

 

Finally safe and sound 

 

 

 

Reviews

[MandaBear]

This was a scary poem but it was also very mysterious. First you start out running away from something and you think you are safe when you are home in your bed but that might not be the case. This reminds me of scary movies this is how most of them are. You start out okay but the more and more you go into the story the more and more unsafe you are. Great Job with this. Keep up the great work.

[Mark Emerson]

Creeps or what it was really good

[CecilA]

GDM,

This is one of your best poems. Thanks for the nightmare!

I agree with the previous reviews.

[Falling Leaf.]

Short and eery. I liked it!

[Felicity's Eve]

Gives me shivers! >.<

Great work! :)

[Andie]

Very well done! It was truly creepy. Good job.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Oh, this is written in such a scary and mysterious perspective. I love poetry, like this one, that keeps in upended to have the reader staring at the page what might have happened next to the character in which the situation happened to. This reminds me of the typical horror movie scenarios, which is totally awesome! I usually stick to writing about love and all of its ups and downs. I don't know whether or not I could pull off writing about such deep and horror writing. You're great at it, and you're a potential writer for sure. Never stop writing since you're what writers need in the writing world! I do indeed like how you wrote "Finally safe and sound" in the last line but drew a line through the words. Most likely because when something odd or scary happens to you, you're not safe and sound in bed. You're most likely still being haunted! Keep up the excellent and suplerb work! :)

"Shadows grab
Floor stained red
Now in bed"--Nice and so poetic! ;D

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG ;)

[Rika]

Thanks ashley i will!!!

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You're welcome and awesome:)

[Tina Kline]

Very chilling and sinister. The reader is left wondering it the person made it or not by the end, at least this reader! Very good poem, I really like this.

[Soul Fire]

Wow, that's amazing.

[David the writer]

Delicously written, brother of the dark! Muhahaha, I loved the last line. That is all the reader needs to know, how the story never ends. They can then imagine how it ends which makes it a fear personalized for each person who reads this. Quiet good, brother!