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The Snowy Hike

The Snowy Hike

A Poem by G.W. Saitreux
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entry into a ten-word contest

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The snow appeared without hesitation,
our outfits left to the imagination.

A beautiful sight,
A horrible plight.

We rented a cabin out and up the road.
Yet our neglect to wear warm clothes
caused our shivering in the snow.
Until we lit the hearth up the road, 
in the creepy rental abode.

We stood together for warmth.
Her frigid breath upon my nape,
was a guiding hug
was a guiding tug
to the basement steps behind us.

As I turned to face her
our legs began collapsing,
simultaneously,
for a moment I felt frozen!

We went back to the hearth,
with warm furs and thick blankets,
by each other's warmth we shed our egos:
we spent the night in laughter!

- G.W. Saitreux

© 2018 G.W. Saitreux



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I love the way you used the designated words in a way that is seamless & invisible to your message. This is a story in verse that's honest & refreshing. I was picturing the scene & feeling the cold (I live in a cabin in the mountains & it's COLD in here, this morning!) Nice job of ending this on a playful note! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

G.W. Saitreux

6 Months Ago

Thanks for the review! I am glad you picked up the mountain, I too live in the mountains and wanted .. read more



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The poem flows very well. The 10 words are placed beautifully!

Posted 6 Months Ago


G.W. Saitreux

6 Months Ago

Thanks for the review!
I love the way you used the designated words in a way that is seamless & invisible to your message. This is a story in verse that's honest & refreshing. I was picturing the scene & feeling the cold (I live in a cabin in the mountains & it's COLD in here, this morning!) Nice job of ending this on a playful note! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

G.W. Saitreux

6 Months Ago

Thanks for the review! I am glad you picked up the mountain, I too live in the mountains and wanted .. read more
I enjoyed the thoughts and how you described the Winter. You led the reader to a happy ending where two people accepted some warmth and some laughter. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote


Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

G.W. Saitreux

6 Months Ago

Thanks for the review! I'm really glad you enjoyed my descriptions of winter, one of my favorite sea.. read more
Coyote Poetry

2 Months Ago

I did enjoy and you are welcome.
This was truly a pleasure to read :-) Again (as I commented on another one of your poems), the rhythm in this poem when read aloud is beautiful.

You cannot tell this poem was made to deliberately have the 10 words. It just flows so naturally. Very well done!

Yari

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

G.W. Saitreux

6 Months Ago

Thanks Yari, I really appreciate your kind words
Oh that was a wonderful read. Full of lovely imagery and a clever use of the 10 words. Thank you for submitting this to the challenge!

Helena

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

G.W. Saitreux

6 Months Ago

Thank you for creating the challenge and the review!

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Added on January 22, 2018
Last Updated on January 22, 2018
Tags: contest, ten-word-requirement, fun, hiking, cabin, poem, bad luck, snow, funny, good times

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Gabriele Weiss-Saitreux



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