Solitude (A Conversation)

people speak with each other

Person 1:

When I'm all alone
And sitting in my room

In my solitude,

I let my mind
Take flight at night

Person 2:

When I'm all alone

I sit out in the park
In my solitude,
I let the sun

Shine on my skin

Person 1:

When I'm out walking

Down the road
In my solitude,

I think of you

What you might be doing

Person 2:

When I'm out walking

Around the plaza

In my solitude,

I do the same thing too

I think of you

Person 1:

When I'm all alone

I sit out in the park

In my solitude,

I dream a dream,

A dream of you

Person 2:

When I'm all alone

And sitting in my room

In my solitude,

I dream a dream,

A dream of you

Reviews

[Hailey Juliet]

I found the approach you took with this piece to be quite interesting. I've never thought of or seen dialogue in poetry done this way. I found it interesting how the more the persons shared their experiences of solitude with one another, the more they realized that their experiences were similar, mirroring each other, and the same by the last stanza. That solitude, though physically isolating, was not an altogether solitary experience, but a shared experience between the two of them, each the other's muse.

"In my solitude,
I dream a dream,
A dream of you"

The way I read it anyway, you quite uniquely demonstrate how even in physical isolation we may be connected to those we love, care about, or simply contemplate for it's own sake. How often do we think of another, while they also think of us, in some other place, alone or otherwise? Not all relationship is visible, not all solitude, solitary. That's what I got anyway:P

This was thought provoking and deep and I found it really interesting and positively challenging to read, great piece!

Hailey

[G.W. Saitreux]

A spot-on review! I'm really glad you enjoyed it as I was endeavoring slightly out of my writing comfort zone with this piece. Seems like it was well worth it

[lessa (kenzie)]

Very cleverly written, I love it. You'd be good at playwriting.

[G.W. Saitreux]

thanks, i'll think about it

[Lavi]

The first stanza is my favorite but the entire thing has a good rhythm. It's hard to predict while reading it too which is refreshing. Good work!

[G.W. Saitreux]

Thanks I really try to emphasize rhythm in my writing so I'm glad to hear it's getting across well. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts. Each set of lines adding to the memory of a dream. I liked the hope and the want of the poetry. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[G.W. Saitreux]

Thank you for your review, I'm glad you liked it!

[Coyote Poetry]

I did like and you are welcome.

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

🌹wondering what that distant soul is doing and when will it become your souls mate? Waiting, wondering, wishing yet missing🌹lovely words and set out🌹

[G.W. Saitreux]

Thanks for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed the read.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

My pleasure I always enjoy ur words just don’t have enough time in a day or night to read..🌹