Dream Scheme (Pt. III)

surrealism

Shall we never learn?

Shall we never yearn?

I saw an object once

Again knew trumpets

Shattering windows

Could it remain in my brain?

Stop the thoughts, start doing

Up before the bells, get moving

Could it be hell there?

Could it be heaven here?

I chase the vision

Down corridors of sky

Imprint like sandpaper, 

What might it mean to die?

A kiss floats around like daydreams

Crisp, pale nights flowing seams

Of warm breezes upon the nape of

A neck moulded, dysphoria exploring

Chasms of roaring abyss frequenting

A location of eternal searching themes

Looking through the window

Pains of a soul racing

Cells caught dividing

Not quite half,

Not quite whole,

Digging holes in the soul

We've all got things to sell

The broken sails look upon attention or content?

Purgatory

Fate constantly collides upon the present

Peered through that window torn in two

Seen where those trails lead

Could it be already dead?

- G.W. Saitreux

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

A quite mystifying poem here. It has the sound of some profound inner experience, perhaps a religious vision, perhaps a psychotic break.

[Lavi]

What might it mean to die?

(Could it be hell there?
Could it be heaven here?)

*struggles to put feelings into words*
This is incredible. I'll have to start with that. I'm pretty much speechless at the moment and words are escaping me. I've never heard anyone ever say what you had - where I wrote it above - and it is like taking a hundred conversations I failed to convey what I was trying to say and you put in essentially three sentences/lines.

I love (x3) how you expressed how where we are now could be what most people dream of heaven to be after death and that what if it were the other way around. What if this were heaven and the next life, in a place after death, is hell. It's why I don't think about it. Atheism is a necessity in philosophy like this but still very good to keep in mind.

And what does it mean to die? A thought many don't truly take into consideration or those that do take it to a whole other level of obsession. Still, you managed to express it in such a unique and original way with several other topics of interest included. Definitely, my favorite part of the Dream Scheme so far and thoroughly enjoyed reading this.

[emipoemi]

...........This - is - powerful.....and profound! wow! quite enjoyed the progression of this, the world painted throughout the adventure.....the deep questions asked - Well done! Simply sublime!

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Yes fates collided upon the present- looking through the window it’s the truth we see and the rest are living a illusion- never is what it seemed and always seems to be much more- love your words- great thoughts- 🌹

[Coyote Poetry]

Very nice use of words.
Cells caught dividing
"Not quite half,
Not quite whole,
Digging holes in the soul
We've all got things to sell
The broken sails look upon attention or content?
Purgatory"
I love the above lines. A place I knew. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote