Honeyku

Puzzle of nature
Dripping with sticky treasure
Always worth the risk

Reviews

[ranscan]

I am intrigued by the title. A less than exhaustive search on the net came up with references to a musical group and social media pages. I could construct several lines of reasoning that might lead to plays on the name for the poetic form, or in the nature of a commentary, general or specific, on social media or the internet.
The numerical is classic, and though it deals with at least on the surface something of nature, perhaps subjectively I taste an emotional or transcendent sense which could set this piece in the modern rather than classic haiku.
I am looking for the "cutting" word, which may be simply my own unfamiliarity with haiku breeding an expectation for an obvious word choice when you may have applied a much softer blade.
Still a lovely work to delve into, a full meal rather than a casse-croûte.

[Gaia Octavia]

I'm sorry to disappoint but the title is just something I wrote offhand (not unlike my 'Rage-ku' - https://shar.es/1MlVKP ). As for the form, both were written over 5 years ago during my first poetry workshop I took for my degree so they are both severely lacking in actual haiku form. Thank you for your thoughtful review 🐝😊🐝

[Zugzwang]

A delicious haiku, pardon the pun.

[Gaia Octavia]

No problem. I see you've been a busy bee. I'll check ur stuff out soon.

[Zugzwang]

Hyuck hyuck. Take your time.

[Gaia Octavia]

See what I did there?

*unenthusiastic rimshot*