Melt

Written with Natalie C.

We are bright white snowflakes,
Soulmates carved from the very same icy dust,
Thrust into Aphrodite�s lake of wonder,
Under destinies watchful eyes,
Cries of seraphims sing into the night skies,
Lies frozen within our heart�s den,
Then a step into the icy waters of hell,
Fell deep inside a blazing fire,
Vampire of desire sits and admires

Mercy
Emotion
Losing
Touch

Separated shadows blended into one
Gone far beyond the point of no return
Yearn for peace and tender feel
Steal a taste from a sweet embrace
Face conceals a lust so true
Through frozen windows, just me and you
Rescue falling cherubims of sapphire
Acquire one last precious moment
Potent energy , silently slipping away

Mystical
Events
Leading
Together

Angels watch over true sweethearts kiss
Bliss fills the centre of their icy beings
Seeing romance at the centre of existence
Distance between them slowly ending
Descending hand in hand so inviting
Fighting to live their way of choosing
Losing sometimes submerged so low
Snow flurry falls from the dark skies above
Love conquers life�s ever ticking clock

Author's Note

We worked on getting the last word on the last line to rhyme with the first on the next.

Reviews

[Nick Erickson]

This is just as brilliant re-reading it again as it was the first time, seeing how masterfully the two of you worked together to give this poem true feeling and emotion. Emotions so vivid and real. The rhyme working very well with this piece - rhyming the first word with the last in each sentence.
Again, excellent, outstanding and well done!

[Death's Poet]

Absolutely beautiful! I love how it paints such a beautiful picture in the mind as you read it. I love that it has endless amounts of romance without being cliche at all. A very difficult thing to accomplish. I love it. Beautiful work!

[Laura E. Aranda]

I wish it would keep going on and on.......

destinies needs to be Destiny's I think........
cheers,lea

[THE BLACK SEAL]

this is in my opinion one of your best and i am adding it to my faves

[Fantasyfairy]

This is a beauiful write. It flows so perfectly and the metaphors are so pretty. I really like this. The whole thing is just such a poetic write. It is like one person wrote it, and it is so well done. The picture that goes with just adds to the perfection. This has to be one of my favourites. XX

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is really a great piece...
I love the idea of your work and the way you've expressed it...!!!
I must admit that I haven't read any of the piece like this from some time..
an awesome read!

[R J Askew]

One benefit of the data base collapse is re-reading some favourites and this on second reading remains a firm favourite of mine...i just love the notions of the 'vampire of desire' sitting there watching admiringly. In fact everything about this work I find pleasing. The image, though I dunno if this is your original. I like the wolves sniffing around the iciness of it all...and yet in the midst of the great freeze something is going on. Pulling my poetry anorak snorkel hood over my head, i like the execution of the front end rhyme very much and I even find it pleasing that there are 3 verses each of 9 lines...as 9 is a generally pleasing number being 3X3 three being a beautiful prime. Sorry, hastily throws poetry anorak off! Ahem. Great job though. One of my favourites.

[Rain]

This was bizarre. lol. But, it worked. I like far out minglings of thought. It's something you need to read twice. Rain..

[echo]

Neat. Pretty disconnected writing, but I guess its charming in its own way.

[Olivera]

Powerful. Come and join group I have just created.
High Goth