Colour me in Kisses

Colour me in Kisses

A Poem by Gary H

Crimson lines drip down endlessly
Outside a body, inside I WANT to feel you.
Let me open a door
Open until I can see
Understand the struggle you fight
Realise your pain, release your heart.

My world is yours
Emotions affected by the cut.

Incision of that blade hurts me too
Not seen or felt by you.

Knives dig into my body
I let them, want them.
Spurting blood sees demons laugh
Sensing relief when life has no reason.
Enticing I will cry - 'come with me now'
Showering you forever in affection, care and love.
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© 2008 Gary H



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I'm uncomfortable about blood so I can't focus too well on this. But these two lines catch my eye "Incision of that blade hurts me too" and "Knives dig into my body" ... in fact I read them before I read the first line. Thinking about this as far as I can, it is a loving plea couched in the language of the cutter to try and find another way. Strong, bold poem.


Posted 9 Years Ago


7 of 7 people found this review constructive.




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i really enjoy this poem, its very descriptive as if i could see what was going on with my own eyes, i also appreciate your creativity in making the title a acyronym for every line in your poem..

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

its a good write, though for me the flow isnt good, its rugged. the subject, however is nevertheless excellent and it never gets boring reading one of these.
the sturcture of this poem is well done, love the dripping blood mate!

cheers :)x

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

beautifully done,I really enjyed it :]

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This looks like something i would right... but you just make it ten times better!!!
This poem is awesome, good job...

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amazing imagery with this. There is such deep and potent emotion in this piece. You have created a fantastic and very beautiful acrostic poem here.

Posted 7 Years Ago


This was one heck of a write! Your imagery was perfection! Many pieces in this form are written perfectly, but the image of the words sometimes doesn't relay itself to the reader. This piece did. The ending, WOW!
What can I say that the other's haven't I am in awe of this piece..




Peace;
Magdelena

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Now this is one amazing write here
I like the ending and how you have it sat up
to where the color bleeds at the end.
Wonderful expression here.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was absolutely amazing! I mean, it was rather sad and disheartening but all the raw emotion that came from it was intense. I think the blood drips at the end are chilling as well. Into my favorites this goes. Awesome job :]

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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This is amazing! It is well written and I just love what you did with the title!
I loved the lines

"Let me open a door
Open until I can see
Understand the struggle you fight
Realise your pain, release your heart. "

You are an amazing writer!



Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is really good. i love what you did with it. you wrote about love and the need to feel love and how we tend to react to not having that love, it seems pure and full of meaninf, evry author has a stroy and evry story has some one who went thru hell to write it

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on February 21, 2008
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Gary H
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