Blowin' in the Wind (a wind blown away)

written for Chloe's competition.

life flies in the breeze
letters of love
find themselves muddled
elov
oevl
voel
hoping to land
seeking peace

angels fight devils
devils fight back

war floods in like rain
hurricanes of torture
frighten us all

in a sky of reply
clouds of doubt float by
decisions incomplete
hidden by money
leave sad reflections

thinking back to Bob
singing his song -
answers are here

'blowin' in the wind'

now blown past
in a whirlwind of time

leaving a jangly melody
memories of hope,
freedom, peace
where a breath of air
could once have saved us
now we are too late

judgement day beckons......

Reviews

[These Haunted Hallways]

This was really awesome, man. It truly reminded me of my past poem, 'Two Ghosts of the Mind.' Battling the thoughts of evil and angelic; going in and out of things, and trying to be stable in the rest of the process; hoping one day it will all just go away, and that you have finally won the huge war. Everything intertwines and comes together in this piece. Beautiful job, i must say, as well as the picture, too!

B.A.

[Corey]

This is an excellent poem. I especially enjoy the fact that it mentions Bob Dylan (who I believe is arguably one of the greatest lyricists of all time). Nice apocalyptic tone...I agree with it. Great job.

[TL Boehm]

Not sure if this was intended, although from your verbal acumen I can assume it was, each stanza seems to be a complete thought - carried aloft through the poem like leaves scuttering in the breeze - it gave the poem a transience that was delicious, as though if I looked away - I would miss the profound image flitting by...and then....you dropped anchor with the last line. Awesome write.

[*** Hey Jude***]

I love the way you intertwine environmental realities to relate the feelings you have expressed so beautifully. You have a strong, but gentle touch with your words keep up the great writing! ~ Jude xo

[A Forsaken Dream]

That was truly amazing it has such beautiful structure. Keep on writing I look forward to reading more of your work

-James

[R J Askew]

CENTRED TEXT LOOKS GREAT TO MY MIND...NICE N BALANCED. I think the first verse is the best and tremble at the thought of being judged. But on the other hand I don't know why. The more we know the less innocent and fresh life seems.

[Carole]

A magnificent write Gary, but then I expect nothing less from you. Your writing is superb and you are extremely talented. Beautiful picture as well. Blessings, Carole

[Mel Stevens]

Interesting poem, with an air of almost sadness, but I'm not sure why. I like the way it is written, and the centered font. It fits the poem better.

[E. M. Murren]

Bravo. Such beauty in this work. It is a poem I must return to again and again... I feel as if I would find more meaning each time. Well done.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Well written poem, nice job. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Gary, it is wonderful.. love it!
It is certainly your poem but i hear Dylan too .. great lines and metaphors.. thanks so much for taking time to write this .. loved it!

Chloe
xoxo