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A Poem by Gary H
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bexhill beach


And so I finally find peace,
solace in blue sea, sky, the white wisp of cloud,
salty breeze in the air, a crackle of pebbles
as I walk to the waters edge
where seaweed slides under the surface.
A foot splashes before being joined by the other,
cold skin shivers, goose pimples.
I look straight ahead, there, on the horizon,
where she waves is where I will go.
My body launches into flotsam and jetsam,
effluent and little fishes, feeling free floating
in the ocean. I close my eyes,
I know there will be no cries, only silence.
Final breath bubbles are swept away,
lost in the foam of immersing spray,
surrendering to the seabed, where crabs
crawl and barnacles slowly bite onto bones.
True friends forever hidden in the depths
And so I finally find peace.

© 2009 Gary H



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I adore the book-ending of this poem, the repetition of "and so I finally find peace." You also have lovely alliteration going on in this piece. The image "barnacles slowly bite onto bones" is beautiful. You've touched upon the mythic here and also on shipwrecks. There are so many ways this piece can be interpreted. Wonderful!

You seem so attentive to detail; you may want to consider revising the "blue sea, sky," which seems to fall flat in comparison to the masterfully captured "a crackle of pebbles." Just a friendly suggestion!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This poem reminds me of north Devon, especially the "cold skin shivers"


Posted 4 Years Ago


Gary H

4 Years Ago

The picture was taken a bit further along the coast in Bexhill, East Sussex.
wow you have such beautiful imagery!

Posted 4 Years Ago


i feel relaxed with your poem.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sounds like heaven.. you can take me there any day x

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good work.Like the way you invoke lots of associations that automatically produce
a feeling of a genuine experince.A good poem that works fine.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Good right mate! The imagery you create here is beautiful!
Cheers! :)x

Posted 6 Years Ago


I Love this, very much so~~

Posted 6 Years Ago


imagery is great. and what makes it great is when you are able to hear the water flowing to the sand and here the crabs crawling around and feel the water on your feet. this is very spiritual and can be taken as a religious piece or a love piece, to where one follows the other when the other can no longer follow them. One can think the two died peacefully or interpretation allows that maybe they left one period of their lives to another. maybe a nice vacation home by the beach lol.

either way, the feeling of love and peace and serenity are clear here. good work.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Love it.

Posted 6 Years Ago



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