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And so I finally find peace,
solace in blue sea, sky, the white wisp of cloud,
salty breeze in the air, a crackle of pebbles
as I walk to the waters edge
where seaweed slides under the surface.
A foot splashes before being joined by the other,
cold skin shivers, goose pimples.
I look straight ahead, there, on the horizon,
where she waves is where I will go.
My body launches into flotsam and jetsam,
effluent and little fishes, feeling free floating
in the ocean. I close my eyes,
I know there will be no cries, only silence.
Final breath bubbles are swept away,
lost in the foam of immersing spray,
surrendering to the seabed, where crabs
crawl and barnacles slowly bite onto bones.
True friends forever hidden in the depths
And so I finally find peace.

Reviews

[Elena Rojas]

I really like the syllable pattern you put in the poem, and the way you described the ocean. I myself have never seen the ocean, so I have not an idea how it feels to be on the ocean. But alas, I can relate to the fact that I find peace in nature, and in what is around me. Keep up the good work! I can't wait to hear more from you! ;-)

[Lucy Morningstar &heart..]

The last 2 lines combined are so freaking wonderful....this is really really really beautiful! kudos for writing something that moves me to tears!

[Marina]

That is a relaxing piece :) Peace!

[s y e]

You have a beautiful way of writing and the imagery is great!

[englishr0se]

This poem reminds me of north Devon, especially the "cold skin shivers"

[Gary H]

The picture was taken a bit further along the coast in Bexhill, East Sussex.

[Dark Butterfly]

wow you have such beautiful imagery!

[Rorenzu]

i feel relaxed with your poem.

[Bewitching Sensations]

sounds like heaven.. you can take me there any day x

[Leslie Philibert]

Good work.Like the way you invoke lots of associations that automatically produce
a feeling of a genuine experince.A good poem that works fine.

[Jake Erkens]

Good right mate! The imagery you create here is beautiful!
Cheers! :)x

I Love this, very much so~~