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bexhill beach


And so I finally find peace,
solace in blue sea, sky, the white wisp of cloud,
salty breeze in the air, a crackle of pebbles
as I walk to the waters edge
where seaweed slides under the surface.
A foot splashes before being joined by the other,
cold skin shivers, goose pimples.
I look straight ahead, there, on the horizon,
where she waves is where I will go.
My body launches into flotsam and jetsam,
effluent and little fishes, feeling free floating
in the ocean. I close my eyes,
I know there will be no cries, only silence.
Final breath bubbles are swept away,
lost in the foam of immersing spray,
surrendering to the seabed, where crabs
crawl and barnacles slowly bite onto bones.
True friends forever hidden in the depths
And so I finally find peace.

© 2009 Gary H


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I really like the syllable pattern you put in the poem, and the way you described the ocean. I myself have never seen the ocean, so I have not an idea how it feels to be on the ocean. But alas, I can relate to the fact that I find peace in nature, and in what is around me. Keep up the good work! I can't wait to hear more from you! ;-)

Posted 5 Years Ago


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imagery is great. and what makes it great is when you are able to hear the water flowing to the sand and here the crabs crawling around and feel the water on your feet. this is very spiritual and can be taken as a religious piece or a love piece, to where one follows the other when the other can no longer follow them. One can think the two died peacefully or interpretation allows that maybe they left one period of their lives to another. maybe a nice vacation home by the beach lol.

either way, the feeling of love and peace and serenity are clear here. good work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Love it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Aloha Gary,

I am back after a long absence. How have you been? Busy I see. I will be by again soon to read the rest of your pieces. This one is beautiful by the way and paints such a tranquil and serene images for the mind's eye... Sending you smiles from across the miles. alisa ;-)

Posted 13 Years Ago


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I wanna go there! seriously. :( baeutiful.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Fantastic. Touched me deeply.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

awesome.. such a lovely poem

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the sensory images you used to bring the scene to life - few men can resist a siren's call, it seems.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Wow, this was fantastic! There's a lot that comes with this poem, and with so many meanings as well. Imagery was awesome, too. Really wonderful job with this one! :)

M.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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