The Next Big Thing

What's the point in living

When I'm dying everyday?

How much is life worth giving

If it's going to die away?

 

Every time I cry inside

Another piece is gone

Every time my smile subsides -

I'm getting something wrong!

 

Sunshine breaks my life anew

Blue skies reflect my dreams

Life's too short with much to do

Too long without the means

 

There's not enough present and too much past

Too many grey skies to bring

Far too much waiting and heading too fast

For the next …Big …Thing.

Reviews

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

It makes me happy i came across this poem of yours.This is different from your other writes.You let yourself show here...a bit more than you usually do :)..There is a lingering pain,melancholy here which i like and as always you are always in control of what you write,you do not get overwhelmed by the subject,by the words...they are yours and you weave them into poetry as you want.
The first stanza,it made me choke..how many times have i asked myself this,yet there is something very vital,very strong in us that makes us stand up even if we are hitting the lowest low in our lives.Also the lines..Every time I cry inside
Another piece is gone..so much vulnerable..and an ache behind those words which is palpable.
My favorite line here was There's not enough present and too much past
Too many grey skies to bring...'there is not much present and too much past'..i like that line a lot..
It was great to see you write this way too..:)

[Sasha]

I love this. Not that you should be terribly surprised when anyone says so, but I do. The whole thing is brilliant, but the second stanza and the last two lines of the third are my favorites. It came together very neatly at the end and was short, but expressed so much..
Well done, you.

[J.Black]

Love the rhyme and flow of this poem- 1st stanza really makes me ponder!

[Truly Ross-Wisehart]

Wow! I now wish that I had the original in front of me because whatever you changed...this is really special. I absolutely walk away with a different feeling than when I read it the first time. Seems less like someone having a 'moment' and more like contemplation. One that goes from cynical to reflective. I like this a lot!

~True

[Truly Ross-Wisehart]

This reads, to me, like someone is having 'a moment'. Perhaps overwhelmed, perhaps just exhausted. Generally not their best day. The pace is quick, the rhyme is right on. I do not think you intended this to read as a 'deep' poem, but as something that just...is.

As such, nice write!

~True

[Tate Morgan]

I like it but still think the need to change the one part will rectify the problem

[MissWordSmith]

alright. this wasn't your best write in my opinion because it had less depth than your other work.
however, i really liked the last stanza. it was really nice, and meaningful.

[A.Lee]

This is good. It feels sad and confused, but again not depressing. I really enjoyed the last two stanzas. I liked that you incorporated both sides of the story, so to speak. Life's too short and yet too long. Not enough of this, too much of that, too slow and too fast. Well described.