68th birthday rap

Someone who writes rap poetry once suggested I have a go-so-just for a lark-I did and here is the result

Sixty Eight Birthday Rap

sixty eight

           can't be great

getting older

cold gets colder

knowing body wearing out

blood not right

problems with sight

arthritis as well

but what the hell?

sixty eight

still fighting mate

criminals rule country

getting tense

but it all makes sense

there comes a time even

if you feel rough

when you join with othrs

and scream “enough!”

sixty eight years

still battered by fears

yet day or night

unending fight

the way to get touch?

Just roar “enough!”

ruling elite

need knocking off

thirty eight

feeling rough

but let us

scream together

“enough is enough!”

George Coombs

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Actually, George, this is composed in Skeltonic Verse form, and perfectly, too, I might add.
A brilliant piece, My Friend, that not only expresses the worn condition age brings on, but the awareness of that which is around us to be effected by, and a message of how to remedy it.
Great stuff, George, from a masterful pen!
Check this out:
the way to get touch? (did you mean tough?)
Just roar “enough!”
I don't mean to be picky … stuff, sometimes, just jumps out at me … LOL!
Actually, I think your rap could rival Snoop Dog and LL Cool J, Ice T, et al.

Whatever, you know I love it, eh?
Diolch yn fawr, Fy Chyfaill ⁓ Richard :)

Note:
Skeltonic Verse which today is sometimes, also, referred to as Tumbling Verse, is from the 15th century, when English poet John Skelton (1460-1529) created short lines which resemble the hemistich of the Tumbling Verse of King James ... the lines are of irregular dipodic meter, with a tumbling rhyme.

And, here's a very clear and entertaining treatise on this amazing classical form:
http://popularpoetryforms.blogspot.com/2013/01/skeltonic-verse.html

[George Coombs]

thankyou Richard and yes, i think I did mean 'tough' I had neevr heard of skeltonic verse before thanks also for that

[Richard🖌]

It is a pleasure to share with you, George. : )

[George Coombs]

thank you Richard

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

What a surprise! RAP- Love the energy, the rhythm and flow , and most of all the message. Happy 68th Birthday Dear George!! God bless you and I hope you have at least 100 more! "Just roar Enough!" - great RAP rallying cry for the current situation! Love this!!

[George Coombs]

thankyou Anette