The Fall of Spring Peepers

The Fall of Spring Peepers

A Poem by Greg Farina

The lion whose roar was word,

She was lying down

With the man who’d speak till he’d bleed.

“Peep, peep,” said the dying bird,

Lying on the ground.

“Peep, peep,” Said the living in the tree.


Blind Miss Joyce dressed in a gown,

Colored gold and red,

Wishing her deep-voiced tailor had stayed.

“Reap, reap,” says the cheated man,

Seeing her in bed.

“Reap, reap,” Says the man who is glad.


© 2017 Greg Farina



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I definitely hear this as some weird nursery rhyme. It's brilliant in many ways, and I absolutely love the structure and flow, The musicality falls on the right notes, and it's all in all marvellous. My only note, is that it would all sound better if you simply repeated the quotation lines completely (so rather than "living in the tree" and "man who is glad" repeat exactly what you have after the "peep peep" and "reap reap". It would really make a difference and put it over the top). Well done!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Greg Farina

2 Months Ago

Hm... I'll think about it! Thanks for the review!
emipoemi

2 Months Ago

my pleasure.


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I definitely hear this as some weird nursery rhyme. It's brilliant in many ways, and I absolutely love the structure and flow, The musicality falls on the right notes, and it's all in all marvellous. My only note, is that it would all sound better if you simply repeated the quotation lines completely (so rather than "living in the tree" and "man who is glad" repeat exactly what you have after the "peep peep" and "reap reap". It would really make a difference and put it over the top). Well done!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Greg Farina

2 Months Ago

Hm... I'll think about it! Thanks for the review!
emipoemi

2 Months Ago

my pleasure.

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Tags: Words, Death, Life, Reap, Love, Cheating