Playing In The Wind

I was in love, with my best friend. It was never meant to be.

Simplicity is floating,
A fairy blowing in the wind
Freshly freed from the dandelion clock's grasp.
Hovering there gently
As the forces join together
To make it dance.
As I'd imagine love's dance
To be pretty and elegant
This fluffy, white ballerina
Flits,
And twirls,
Pirouetting on the curves of the air.

Another ballerina is dancing near by.
Their dance continues,
Loving,
And happy.
Weaving in and out.
Barely touching.
And as they spin faster
In their desire for something more exquisite
They lock.
Their clasping hands,
In each precious turn,
Brings them closer.

Soon this harmony brought
By two stunning factors,
Exceeds all boundaries set before by their individual parts.

Before long though this beauty
Comes crashing to the ground.
As the wind fades and reality hits.
They are no longer allowed to be flitting fairies.
Instead they lie beside each other on the ground
As friends.
In love.

Reviews

[Cdnsurfer]

Hey Gillzy. Your best poem yet. Isn't it a dance caught on the winds of chance? Indeed, 'tis so that lovers glide on a spinning planet, free of the gravity that weights down the soul and binds them to broken earth. At the end of the day, if two people are meant to be together, then that's all that matters. Which is more important if forced to make a choice? The choice is obvious. I see you're starting to push and vary your verbs -- excellent. Well done, my friend. Cheers! Rob

[{Angel Redd}[Formerly A..]

I had to read this over to take it all in; there were so many things going on my mind,so many visuals, and that's a good thing.

[penloverfool]

I appreciate the author�s ability in expressing this poem in a very vivid fashion. The subject is uncomplicated, yet the impact is stupendous.


the fool..................................................................................................................................

[Helen Woodward]

Good use of metaphores, but if I hadn't known the background of this I would have thought it was just a lovely poem...as it stands I can see the beauty of the Romeo/Juliet heartache.
I have to say that I never studied poetry and consequently I have serious issues trying to understand it, much of it is obscure and lost on me.
As far as I can see there are no grammar mistakes and I like the structure of the piece.

[Crazy Cat Man]

a great metaphorical piece on 2 friends who cannot be together for the fear of lossing someone else.......... these are surely the worst situations becuz LOVE is right there in front your EYES and you cannot get it........

They are no longer allowed to be
Flitting fairies.
Instead they lie beside each other
On the ground
As friends.
In love.

therefore as 2 friends embrace a moment in time they will never get again. ....perfect ending to this piece

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

This is a very emotional piece and it has some beauty to it but I was some what let down to see to
flow was a little choppy because of the longer lines. When they are so easily fixed The content is wonderful so it's a good write. I just like a smooth flow.
Debby

[Erotic Goddess]

How long I wonder, can that kind of love really be held in check? You painted an amazing picture, the carefree falling into love and the dash to earth as reality sets in... Then begins the stolen glances, the soft brush against each other, the electric shock. Tis only a matter of time before love wins...

[Barry Simiana]

i read the first stanza and stopped. i just pictured the faeries dance, for some reason it just resonated in me. when i got back to the story i was entranced.
this is a great piece.
thx

[Richard Garen]

Beautiful poetry. I can read it over and over again. This poem is now my current fav. I would like to draw an artpiece to this poetry:0)

[Alistair Canlin]

Love the imagery, very whimsical and summery. It had a gentleness to it that also managed to hide an underlying sadness.

Good one.

[Tomás Ó C..]

Such is the torment of love!