Valentine

A love poem written for Poetry Writing class.

Trees greet us with a rustle of leaves,

and we pass them by with little sound.

A smile plays with your lips as we venture further.

I know not of your plans, and this mystery

plagues my mind: I surrender to the thought.

“Where are we off to?”

No answer to ward away these fears,

now visible through shaky breath and shifty eyes.

Then your voice, true as day, echoes near my ears:

“Do you know where forever finds itself this night?”

My face expresses confusion,

convoluted in wonder,

truthfully lost to your intentions.

“I know nothing of such,” comes my soft reply,

weak as it battles with the air's constrictive cold.

Gentle hands find my waist and pull me into warmth:

“Between our beating hearts, dear Valentine.”  

Reviews

[Night]

This poem is softly spoken, beautifully written. I see the gentle twitches of ruby lips and tentative touches, bashful and sweet. The love is palpable, contradicting with the hiemal air. I have never seen love so brilliantly written. I'm confused about one thing, though: you switched from 'you' to 'she', was that intentional, or is there something I overlooked?

I am touched, truly, by this masterpiece!

[WizardsAffliction]

Good catch! I'll fix that ASAP. Thanks. :)

[Night]

No problem!:D

[April Mitchell]

Awe!That was an amazing and sweet and romantic poem!I loved it!

[WizardsAffliction]

Thanks so much! :)

[I Am Svetlana]

This was cute :) I liked the story you told, the specific wording you used and the imagery!

[WizardsAffliction]

Gracias, señorita! :D

[I Am Svetlana]

You're welcome :)

[thespaceinmybed]

this is beautiful. I really like the way you worded the question "Do you know where forever finds itself in the night?". Very eloquent, and the ending is just perfect.

[WizardsAffliction]

Thanks so much! :D