Evil Stirs in the Drink

One of my favorites that I wrote from Poetry Writing class, especially after it was revised.

How's the orange suit

and the chains that bind you?

I see the smile that hides scared

behind your untrimmed beard.

You're locked in a cage,

just like a monster should be.

Stay busy drooling pools,

hungry for this flesh,

kept starved.

I'm no longer fresh,

an abused carcass vultures pick at.

Why would you care?

You're the one who left me here to rot,

so I let them have their meal.

I'm more delicious

now that I'm worn through decay.

Jack must have been bitter,

when he slid his tongue against yours.

Did his misdeeds rape your liver yet?

Reviews

[I Am Svetlana]

As I read the title of this piece, I thought it was going to be around the topic of alcohol. But interesting to find out that it is about something different. Some people are monsters that deserve to be caged and never released. They deserve to feel the treatment and hurt that they've caused us inside and out. If they don't and can't find time to respect us, perhaps they shouldn't have bothered stepping out their door.

[WizardsAffliction]

I'm glad this poem aroused such contempt. If I'm evoking any sort of emotion from my readers, then I'm probably doing something right. So thank you for reading! :D

[I Am Svetlana]

You're welcome :) And I saw earlier that you posted your work, but decided to rest a bit then review it when I was more awake. I am more than happy to have taken a peek at your work. It's very to hung and beautiful!

[WizardsAffliction]

Thanks! I'm very flattered by your remarks. :D I enjoy your work as well.

[I Am Svetlana]

Thank you! I am also flattered :)

[Tennessee]

Nice, a good prison vibe to it. I like how you wrote it from the victim standpoint. I found some humor at the end, I don't know if you intended that but there you go. Nice. It is very short and maybe you could at more details into it and really bring it alive. Other than that good work.

[WizardsAffliction]

I may expand upon the imagery a bit later on.

Thank you so much for your review! :D