Gallery Quality Love

Gallery Quality Love

A Poem by Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

what is love

if not an unfinished line

a participle dangling her feet in the water  

a noun searching for his lost adjective

a tree without the tall?

 

it is a secret

half filled by illusory hope

left to idle between the white lines

of a street with too many dull lights

too many signs yelling stop

 

i can’t shake the feeling

that my shades are always half drawn

because too much sunlight

would ruin this romance

 

we are better like this

lost in the disorder of not knowing

because the alternative would jar us

into a sharp realization that life mimics art 

 

and maybe our art 

just isn’t gallery quality


© 2013 Girl Friday (Sarah W.)



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Oh there are so many lines, that are so brilliant in this one Sarah, great metaphorical insight, and creativity. This write tells me, it's about love, and love that is too late, or not worth it to hang as beautiful in this gallery, but maybe better, because, all that hangs there, isn't private... and sometimes, a silence between two, can make things much better... again a write that makes you think, and ponder, loved reading it.

- Elisa

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

3 Years Ago

Elisa, you are always such a kind and consistent reviewer. I appreciate you so much :)

3 Years Ago

You're ever so welcome, I appreciate you too my dear friend, keep on writing to us, and yourself, we.. read more



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I really loved this..
Lovely write

Posted 6 Months Ago


I always read and review poetry on 3 levels:

1-The spiritual/philosophical level. Does the piece embrace my aesthetic sensibilities and ignite them
2-The emotional level. Does it evoke an emotional response in me, am I drawn into the drama and feelings of the writer? Has he succeeded at getting me caught up in his own personalized play?
3- The literary level. Are his words and similes, feints and rhymes compellingly articulate, original and freshly creative. What is the degree of professionalism involved?

Harsh standards of judgement perhaps!

You my dear, excel in all three categories. The gift of the really great writers in my opinion, is that they have achieved an adequate degree of technical proficiency that they are freed from the mechanical aspects of writing and can now roam the fields of artistic expression unencumbered, and exploit the fertile fields and verdant hills of creativity unchained.

Ride on! 'top your Muses horse Girl Friday, this writer is eager to hear the reports of all you find in those flowered fields!

(lay version: I think your writing is awesome and you really know how to get your points across artfully! ;)

Posted 11 Months Ago


Wonderful analogies of the simplest yet most complicated of emotions.

Posted 1 Year Ago


I just love the ending 'and maybe our art just isn’t gallery quality'. You want to protect your art from scrutiny, from too much sunlight. You want it to be private, your own brand of art. Because others might misinterpret, judging...

Well done. Authentic.
Could you review mine.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Nice. I like it.
Romanticism of the insecurity that can keep sometimes prevent from fully opening ourselves up to another person. Sometimes the light you speak of seems safer if it's behind curtains, but no less beautiful.

Nice piece!

Posted 2 Years Ago


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I like your art of defining the love...

Posted 2 Years Ago


the best art is a little less than perfect, some civilizations always added a little imperfection lest God might think they were trying to compete

you are the best, I loved this

Posted 2 Years Ago


Perfect.
Creative metaphors that work very well.
Love it!

Posted 2 Years Ago


The third stanza is my favorite. I love where you take the reader in terms of how a so-called reality can ruin what's truly good about an individual's view on what love really means to them. Great work Girl Friday. This is a treasured write & read. :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


and maybe it is supposed to be in the finest of galleries where true love is born

Posted 2 Years Ago



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