Golden cashmere

Golden cashmere

A Poem by Warrior
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This is a scene in which a serene and warm environment is discovered and appreciated. It also has to do with past memories from the character.

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Golden Cashmere

  Golden cashmere a serene sound that triggers the feeling of infinite safety and endless warmth. 


As if you’re sitting on the floor by a cozy fire with a blazing mug of hot chocolate topped with smooth whipped cream, nutmeg and crushed candy cane. Snowflake embroidered fluffy socks and golden cashmere pajamas with white silky twisted trim, surrounding every edge.


Snuggled up with a romantic novel. No school, no obligations, only pure comfort.


Relaxation, she’s all alone with a fluently entertaining international best seller.


 There is a single sound that fills the room, that is the crackling of the fire in the rustic hearth. She gets up from where she sits and lights the candle she keeps on the ledge of the fireplace.


Soft cushioning carpet beneath her. It is a relatively small cottage, with the welcoming scent of burning wood and sweet vanilla. The aroma feels like you’re being wrapped in a comfy winter blanket, where your dreams take flight.


Outside has become the winter wonderland that it develops into annually. The dance of the snowflakes so graceful in the sky, sometimes extended for a while floating in midair.

Happily, not a hint of the icy world beyond touches this oak cottage.

She looks around the comforting room and takes particular notice to the grandfather clock that is placed in-between the double pane window and the self-made cherry wood bookshelf that her and her mother made together a long time ago.


The clock was passed down to her by her grandpa, but it hasn’t operated for years. 

  It is beautiful with carvings directly above its face and golden numbers behind the shiny crystal glass that keeps it safe.

 This exquisite grandfather clock serves as the pleasant reminder of her beloved grandpa.


She turns her attention once more to the book that she had taken from the over packed shelves of the cherry wood bookshelf.


 Warmth has reached the very depths of her heart and soul. Every inch of her is satisfied with such a simply perfect moment.


She continued reading with the wonderful memory of her grandfather that she loved so much. She agrees with the commonly underrated saying:


It’s the little things in life


© 2018 Warrior



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I LOVE THIS POEM.
It is well written with a good descriptive style full of details.
'Snow flake embroidered'.
I LOVE THAT IMAGE!

WELL DONE!!!

Posted 5 Months Ago


The little things in life are the best, I really enjoyed this story of yours, very nicely written and very descriptive.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Warrior

6 Months Ago

Thanks. It's kind of a mental safe place for me. I'm glad you liked it.
Wow! So nicely written, wonderful imagery and very descriptive. enjoyed

Posted 6 Months Ago


Warrior

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it
The title of this one is very fitting. Your word choices, the way you weave them together, gives me the feeling of a warm, golden-lit environment that couldn't be dimmed by the frigid outdoors, all while embraced by the soft-spoken nature of cashmere itself.

Beautiful write, and that isn't an exaggeration at all.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Warrior

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much I'm so grateful that so many people are honestly enjoying this
It means a .. read more
Asante

6 Months Ago

My pleasure! Keep up the strong writing.
"The little things" I appreciate very much.the entire mood this is written feels like I'm in the comfort of my mother's arms.beautiful words to a well structured story

Posted 6 Months Ago


The summary of your deliciously composed and exquisite write says it all. Appreciating the little things in life involves focusing our attention on what is pleasurable, nurturing, and sustaining in our lives and away from those events that are annoying, frustrating, or hurtful. It means practising gratitude for those everyday things that are easy to take for granted or miss altogether. Kudos!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Warrior

1 Year Ago

thank you that is the most beautiful comment I am very grateful
'Soft cushioning carpet beneath her. It is a relatively small cottage, with the welcoming scent of burning wood and sweet vanilla. The aroma feels like you’re being wrapped in a comfy winter blanket, where your dreams take flight.'

Sighhhhh..

What a wonderful place you've created here, phrase by phrase.. tis wonderful, beautiful and utterly peaceful.. There are times when a being can conjur up the best of the past and wrap it around the very core. And somehow, very gently you've done just that. It is the little things in life that matters.. great displays are what they are.. to impress. Small this and that are as precious as a drop of blood.

Thank you so much for sharing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Warrior

1 Year Ago

thanks for the comment that is so sweet. I hope one day i can find where this place is cause now it .. read more
emmajoy

1 Year Ago

What we now have in dreams, we can one day hold in our palms.. perhaps. :)
Warrior

1 Year Ago

I completely agree XD
Ahh, such a beautiful time we can have in moments like these, the silents, the memories, the thoughts and ideas, I enjoy and treasure my peace of mind. Thank you for that.

btw: I ran into this sentence:

"She gets up from her where she sits and lights the candle she keeps on the ledge of the fireplace."

is there a word missing between her and where, or is her supposed to be erased?

Posted 1 Year Ago


Hey there! I love the overall feeling of this piece; the warmth, the Christmas Card world, the family memories. It's very evocative and well painted.

I liked the overall feel of this very much - who wouldn't want to be in this cosy room. And yet at the same time, I found my reading almost disrupted by things that niggled. There are a couple of tense and punctuation things, but the more I re-read it, the more I was struck by almost a battle going on in my head, and perhaps in yours while you were writing. That 'battle' is whether to be factually descriptive or sensorily evocativeI This is just my view, obviously. But overall I felt the sensory pleasures you invited us to feel were almost interrupted by factual descriptive phrases that jarred.

So in that vein I hope you don't object to a few observations:
- Golden cashmere a serene sound ... this cries out for some kind of pause after cashmere
- the comma before 'surrounding every edge' is not needed
- Relaxation, she's all alone - the natural pause after Relaxation suggests a stronger punctuation than a comma
- The single sound crackling fire sentence is a bit awkward. I think you could find a smoother way of saying this without the ', that is' in the middle jarring it somewhat
- 'that it develops into annually' is almost not needed and, I think, could be changed to make that whole dancing snowflakes sentence be more smoothly worded
- 'takes particular notice to the grandfather clock that is placed in-between the double pane window and the self-made cherry wood bookshelf that her and her mother made together a long time ago'. There are some very poignant and rich images and memories in this rather long sentence, but there's also some basic description. Somehow I think the description parts have diluted the rich memory parts. For example, does the reader mind much exactly where the clock is or that the window is double-paned?
- In the clock / Grandpa para you use the past tense. I can see why, but it is almost the only time in the whole piece that you do so, and it jars a little. With a bit of re-phrasing you could avert the need for it. Again, there is some lovely rich evocative memories in this para, but somehow the descriptive factual parts sort of dilute the emotion, at least for me
- She continued reading ... I'd suggest 'continues' would better match the feel of the piece

Just to repeat, this piece paints beautiful pictures, and i only offer these thoughts as possible ways it might get these thoughts and feelings across even more clearly. As always with edit type comments, feel free to completely disagree and disregard!!!

BRs Nigel

Posted 1 Year Ago



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