Wars Last Days

Well I wanted to sum up a fight with my friend in a couple words but sometimes people are a working progress and they just have to let go some times

 

 

 

                                 

 

                                 A battle cry

                        A  bloodcurdling scream

                   all coming from a silent machine

                    A face full of regret soon to set

                              off a dangerous bomb

                             Outrstrectched hands hoping to calm the beast

                             within a innocent girl. Pulling away her tools of destruction

                             And fears of abduction only to be replaced by love

                             A glowing light in the dark

                             Singing like a precious lark

                             The girl approaches cradling it softly as it melts into her

                             Like fairy dust

                             She transforms into somthing beautiful as the darkness fades away

                             It trys to come back but in the girls heart that light is there to

 

                                 stay ....

                            

Author's Note

Pls review i put lots of thought into this so review,review ,review

Reviews

[Maria]

Aww i love this poem can not wait to see ya at cheer!

[Luna]

This is very good. The ideas behind it are very interesting, the saving of a girl from herself. Well done.

[Thorn]

I love the ideas and the metaphors within this piece.

However, there were a few spelling and grammatical errors.
"Darknes" should be "darkness", for a start.
But, overall, this was a wonderful piece that I enjoyed reading. Good job!