Selfish Running

It benefits no one.

No one is safe.

No, not anymore.

When you put the kids to sleep,

Please try not to cry,

And don't let them see

How you're fearing the rest of

Your hectic life.

And you're still trying 

To cover the trail

Of your

Selfish running.

Reviews

[Maan]

Love the start and simplicity of the poem. Words are humble to hear, but powerful within. A quite message to the minds and hearts of readers and believers. To me, the first two lines expressed everything about life we live in this so called modern century or modern world. The rest of the poem just faded every thought in my mind and made me think of it. BUT

as you said,
"It benefits no one."

and I want to add,
"In the end, it benefits no one."

Very nice poem. :)

[Neon]

Lol .. This's a poem of modern life ... Very nice work. Everything's penned into the piece whatever a piece needed from you. Keep on.

[The Analog Kid]

Modern life is quite taxing. Compact, yet effective.

[Seshat Nidaba]

That's truly an interesting take on modern life, family being the ego-centricity of much of nucleur-family orientated individualism. Nice work.

[Crow]

I understand the need for emotional escape from the trail of life through your words, but I also see the desire to hide this need.

Well phrased and concise.

[Miss Marie Riorden.]

"No one is safe.
No, not anymore.
When you put the kids to sleep,
Please try not to cry,
And don't let them see"
That kind of strikes me. Sure, I don't have kids, but you can replace the perspective. For how short this is. It's truly meaningful. Has emotion in it. But I wish really that there was more one it.

-Marie- (:

[Mark]

Hmm ... a little vague, but the emotion is there. Maybe a few more words to let a reader in on the rest of the story. Or not. You're the writer :-)

[Amit Parmessur]

Simple and meaningful. Very nice.

[Tate Morgan]

Without a note this one seems abstract as it doesnt point to anyone in particular,I is a poem i assume o an old beau

[EMF]

Wonderfully powerful, intense, emotional and very real. Well crafted and formed, hitting emotions and mind in equal quantities. Perfection on a page