My Fleeting Breath: Part 3

This is probably the last part...But who knows...My love for Shannon and Poetry is insane so I might just keep writing...

The fire that keeps burning,
Will never go out.
It'll keep burning brighter,
And this I will shout.

My life keeps on going,
With you by my side.
We will never surrender,
Nor give up the fight.

Our battles make us stronger,
Our butns prove we fight.
To make the flames higher,
That light up our night.

We will never forget,
All the battles we fought.
Our scars will remind us that,
Love has to be bought.

Our love is so great,
It consumes us till death.
Even beyond our love grows,
Down into ou graves depths.

And I will keep saying,
As long as I breath.
The fire that keeps burning,
Will never catch a breeze.

So as my humble poem,
It comes to an end.
Let us just remember,
Our loved ones and friends.

And as the day comes to a close,
Let us all replay that time.
When we first saw our loves,
With that twinkle in their eye.

Author's Note

Our flame will always burn brighter and never grow dim. This is how I feel.And I know she feels the same way...I LOVE YOU...

Reviews

[ICE]

You're always at your writing best when it from the heart! :) Beautifully done Greg!!

~Ice

[I Am Everyone]

How sweet! I'm so glad I get to read these! :)

[Sharkapillar]

Fabulous poem, Greg, such wonderful flow and rhyme. ^_^

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Mr. Greg,

This is proof of your devotion to Shannon. Not only am I impressed that you've finished a composition of poems (me, I procrastinate too much) but you show your devotion in this poem. Very nicely done. "The fire that keeps me burning will never go out" is the base for this poem and carries out well through the poem. Remove redundant words like "It" in the seventh paragraph and second line. Say it off in your head, how does it sound? "So as my humble poem, it comes to an end" or "So as my humble poem comes to an end." Reading things aloud can help you rate yourself better. You do write very great especially for a sixteen year old and you have a future. I hope that your love is just as amazing as you write it. :P Kudos, bud. 9.7/10.

Sincerely,
S. W. Scaggs

[Shannon]

*wipes away another tear* a fabulous ending to an amazing poem greg. I love you to ^_^