"How Long"

"How Long"

A Poem by Gregory Lara

How long has it been since I held 
your hand..
Since I hugged you and called you
mine..
How long has it been since i felt 
your lips against mine..
Lips that taste like ice cream..
How long has it been when I last 
heard your laugh..
A laugh that sounds more beautiful 
than all the birds singing in
the morning..
How long, to long...
How long has it been since I seen 
your smile..
A smile that melts my heart..
Its been to long..
But in my dreams I'll hold your hand
hug you and call you mine 
kiss your lips till the end of time
hear your laugh and see you smile 
and feel my heart melt away,
and I will be happy..

© 2011 Gregory Lara


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I can completely understand where you're coming from. It's not easy to go through a break up, but in time it heals, I know it sounds quite cliche but it's true.

-My only criticism for your poem would be to change "How long, to long.." to "How long, too long.." and to change "Its been to long.." to "Its been too long.."
Hope it helps (:

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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The very heartfelt message in your poem could pertain to a break-up, or a death, or the many unavoidable separations life imposes. Anyone would be delighted to be remembered this way. Your observations are light-hearted & sweet & heartrending. Great job delivering this universal message.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I can completely understand where you're coming from. It's not easy to go through a break up, but in time it heals, I know it sounds quite cliche but it's true.

-My only criticism for your poem would be to change "How long, to long.." to "How long, too long.." and to change "Its been to long.." to "Its been too long.."
Hope it helps (:

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i really like the way you write hun.. the lips that taste like ice cream.. YUMMy

Posted 12 Years Ago


Nice one there! D

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Its been to long..
But in my dreams I'll hold your hand
hug you and call you mine
kiss your lips till the end of time
hear your laugh and see you smile
and feel my heart melt away,
and I will be happy..

Love this just so simply beautiful.
yes for some of us it has been too long
but HOPE is good


Posted 13 Years Ago


Most of us learn too late to appreciate the people we love. I like the feel of longing to find a place where the simple pleasures can be reached. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago


I like this poem.
I like how you use you imagery!
Seems like you do miss this girl.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Beautiful i like that it repeats "How Long" it sounds kinda sad too but the ending is hopeful and still uplifting. great job! :D

Posted 13 Years Ago


Great poem i like...like all kinds!

Posted 13 Years Ago


^_^

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Gregory Lara
Gregory Lara

Mcfarland, CA



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