My Final Goodbye

we told each other we'll always be there for each other, and when i needed you most...you werent there..

I never got a goodbye from you..

The night we spent together was the best night of my life

I remember it clearly,

Your head on my chest 

Your hand in my hand..

Just like we always talked about

I thought how beautiful you look as I was holding you

I didnt want that night to end

 We kissed, we touched 

And i felt alive..

I knew we'll be happy..

But I never knew it was the last I will hear you say 

"I love you"

We messaged each other saying goodnight 

It was a goodnight,

But the morning wasnt 

I never got a call or text from you

Telling me how your day went 

If youre safe, so i wouldnt worry

And today I knew why..

You decided to leave me

I never got a goodbye

This is my final goodbye

Be safe always, live your life

Find someone new, someone who will love you, as I loved you

I love you, I just wish I got a goodbye from you and not someone else..

Goodbye my love...

Reviews

[?]

oh gosh, those moments you spend together thinking oh how wonderful, never wanting it to end. But then for some reason it does, not knowing why.
This is beauifully sad
Nicely written, makes the reader feel that sadness, feel the questioning.
The ending was very good, mature.
Loved this sad piece

[definitelyjim]

I am in no credible position to criticize anyone else's writing. I do know what I like and how it is presented. Your poem strikes me in the heart and penetrates to my soul. I have gone through a breakup that ended just a bit toward the bright side of tragic. I haven't posted much to this site, to my dismay but I would appreciate it if you read a poem I did post. The subject matter is very similar to what you have written.

[tracey]

hi im quite new to site, just started reading some of your writes, i like to write about myself and things iv been through to, this was lovely it flowed well, i really enjoyed it, you have some nice work i will be reading some more....Tracey

[Ellen Kolman]

This is beautiful...beautifully written...heartfelt and clear...BRAVO

[Insight "MH"]

This is touching, I felt the emotions in each line. Nicely written.

[RibhyMay]

So bitter-sweet! Absolutely fantastic :)

[Érenn]

Such a touching poem. A bitter pill to swallow, but I could feel the pain, the emotions portrayed in the poem. I love the maturity showed towards the end.

[Juzo Bhattarai]

A sweet closure there! Beautiful piece!

[BarnabusBatrue]

I have read some of your other poems and i have to say your vary talented i love the way you write it makes me feel sad but in a good way its hard to do that and i applaud you

[barleygirl]

This is a great poem. It expresses something that's happened to most of us & the "sting" is still there for years to come. I find it interesting the way you've given glimpses of the digital age "texting" and "messaging" & sometimes people prefer to make a poem more "timeless" by choosing words that transcend time, such as "you never reached out to me" . . . "I keep looking for something from you." Frankly, I think it's a toss up whether you want your poem to sound modern or timeless. The main reason I love this poem is becuz it's very literal & we can see the progression of time & what's happening to the narrator. Personally, I like straightforward poetry better.

[Timtim]

thats a sad ending to the poem... i'd have loved to read the narration about how it actually ended. i think theres a whole poem in there. it'd be awesome to read. Good piece :)