Her

Her

A Poem by Giullia King

There was an aura about her. 
Two kindred spirits don’t just meet by accident. 
She was beautiful from the start, 
Her hair was long and soft, and bright eyes.
I knew she would take my breath away as soon as I saw her smile,
but I didn’t know just how breathless I would feel. 
. . . 
She was the first leaf to fall in autumn, 
She was the warm feeling you get when something good happens in your life 
and suddenly a smile emerge on your lips and you think; I'm home. 
She's pure light. 
A cup of hot tea with some sweet honey.  
A shifting monochrome you can't take your eyes off of. 
A breathtaking mystery. 
She's worth every high and low,  
The missing puzzle you so desperately try to find your whole life. 
Only to realize she's right in front of you. 
A work of art. 
She's the shuffle to my board, 
The sand to my castle. 
Her soul is my soul. 
Every time I'm around her, I can feel the hands of magic connecting us, 
tying us together. 
That's got to mean something. 
I love that we are 7 billion souls in this world and my soul found you. 
. . .
Sometimes, I wander off to places that remind me of you. 
Rooftops, bookstores, or looking at the moon, talking about your smile.  
Thinking how lucky the stars are for knowing all your deepest secrets. 
I found myself in late night drives, 
wandering without a destination.
It's an addiction. 
Our destiny together was written in the stars.
I don't know anything special about this world. 
I guess I'll never know anything as special as you. 
In a world full of temporary things, you were my forever. 
And for that, I wanted to say thank you. 
Because I needed you. 
I needed you in this life. 
In another life, another world, 
we would’ve had everything and nobody would’ve been able to punish us for it.


© 2017 Giullia King



Author's Note

Giullia King
All my poems are about him.
This one is from his point of view. I hope you like it.

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Gullia Hi. Looking at this I wondered if I'd already commented but I can't see anything. So just briefly to say this is very moving and beautifully written. Your phrasing paints beautiful pictures and flows smoothly through to the end. Very nice.

You switch halfway through from 'her' to 'you'. It's quite effective and presumably intended to signal a change in emphasis from reflection to talking 'to' a memory.

Nice work. BRs Nigel

Posted 7 Months Ago


In my opinion, the first stanza could be deleted . . . descriptions are "blah" (beautiful, bright eyes, long soft hair, takes my breath away -- generalities & clichés) compared to the other two stanzas, which are written with detailed imagery and well-crafted analogies of comparison ("first leaf in autumn" . . . "tea with sweet honey" . . . "missing puzzle piece"). Overall, I very much enjoy the message, but here's one thing that's a little distracting for me: you use "past tense" (she was this & she was that) and then switch to "present tense" (she's this & that). I think it would sound better if it was all in "present tense" (she IS this & that).

Posted 7 Months Ago


It's pleasant and connecting to the feels while reading.

Posted 9 Months Ago


I liked very much indeed.. its real and oh so lovely without being too ott..thank you for sharing..write on

Posted 9 Months Ago


Very beautiful Gullia..no words..:) 💖

Posted 9 Months Ago


beautifully written, wonderfully detailed. I could feel his passion and deep rooted love in the tender way he described his lady. Perfect.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Giullia King

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much! I'm happy you liked it :)
No, Guillia, I didn't like this poem. I loved it. Your words flowed and were heartfelt. This is how a man is supposed to tell the woman of his life how he feels about her. I am very impressed of how you wrote this from a mans point of view. Very tender and intimate.
Your words are to beautiful to be put in a Hallmark Valentines Day card.
Blessings,
Richie b.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Giullia King

9 Months Ago

Thank you so, so much, Richie! I'm so happy you love this piece :) It was a bit difficult to write f.. read more
I enjoyed this very much! You managed to word what many have felt in a unique way, worth savoring :) I.I.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Giullia King

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Isabella! I'm happy you liked my poem :)
Isabella Ivy

9 Months Ago

You're most welcome! :)
An interesting perspective!

To write a poem from the point of view of another is nothing new in poetry, but to have those words written about the poet herself is something rather different. If there is truth in these words from HIS perpective then all is well and good. Otherwise it might seem like you are delving in vanity and blowing your own trumpet!

Otherwise, your piece is very romantically written, and one rather different to many similar poems of adoration on this site. Nice work.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Giullia King

9 Months Ago

Lol, wait. This poem is not even about me. I gathered some inspiration and thought about doing somet.. read more
The emotion here was so sincere, but those final words... Wow, felt so tragic, oddly I was wanting more! Excellent write.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Giullia King

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much! :)

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