Her

Her

A Poem by Giulia King

There was an aura about her. 
Two kindred spirits don’t just meet by accident. 
She was beautiful from the start, 
Her hair was long and soft, and bright eyes.
I knew she would take my breath away as soon as I saw her smile,
but I didn’t know just how breathless I would feel. 
. . . 
She was the first leaf to fall in autumn, 
She was the warm feeling you get when something good happens in your life 
and suddenly a smile emerge on your lips and you think; I'm home. 
She's pure light. 
A cup of hot tea with some sweet honey.  
A shifting monochrome you can't take your eyes off of. 
A breathtaking mystery. 
She's worth every high and low,  
The missing puzzle you so desperately try to find your whole life. 
Only to realize she's right in front of you. 
A work of art. 
She's the shuffle to my board, 
The sand to my castle. 
Her soul is my soul. 
Every time I'm around her, I can feel the hands of magic connecting us, 
tying us together. 
That's got to mean something. 
I love that we are 7 billion souls in this world and my soul found you. 
. . .
Sometimes, I wander off to places that remind me of you. 
Rooftops, bookstores, or looking at the moon, talking about your smile.  
Thinking how lucky the stars are for knowing all your deepest secrets. 
I found myself in late night drives, 
wandering without a destination.
It's an addiction. 
Our destiny together was written in the stars.
I don't know anything special about this world. 
I guess I'll never know anything as special as you. 
In a world full of temporary things, you were my forever. 
And for that, I wanted to say thank you. 
Because I needed you. 
I needed you in this life. 
In another life, another world, 
we would’ve had everything and nobody would’ve been able to punish us for it.

© 2017 Giulia King


Author's Note

Giulia King
All my poems are about him.
This one is from his point of view. I hope you like it.

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The emotion here was so sincere, but those final words... Wow, felt so tragic, oddly I was wanting more! Excellent write.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much! :)
"The missing puzzle you so desperately try to find your whole life.
Only to realize she's right in front of you.
A work of art."
This is like Woaah!! I deeply felt this piece! The emotions, the flow, superb!
One thing though.. It does seem like an accident at first..although it isn't but we're just too naivè to read the signs.. Great work, Gullia!
Oh one more thing.. Do guys such as this exist? 😛 just saying 😂

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

A million thanks, Yumna! :) I'm so happy that you like this one :)
lol, I don't think so. Bu.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Years Ago

You're most welcome, Gullia! I think there are, you just have to look at the right place 😉
I really enjoyed reading this one, Gullia :-) It is never easy to write from other person's perspective but you did it fine. This love looks heavenly and quite touching too.
wonderfully written :-)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Gorthi! It wasn't easy at all. This guy sounds dreamy lol. But I'm happy I wrote .. read more
Manu

7 Years Ago

My Pleasure :-)
Because I needed you.
I needed you in this life.
In another life, another world,
we would’ve had everything and nobody would’ve been able to punish us for it.

Mmmmm loved these lines and also enjoyed reading it from his point of view :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Ria! I'm happy you found some lines that you liked :)
Well written, Gullia. You've covered this from a male view masterfully. Although there were some minor issues they've been pointed out. I can say that I love the line
'She's the shuffle to my board, 
The sand to my castle.'
A good write. 

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Ted! I was so scared of writing something from His point of view but I'm happy I .. read more
Well, this is a touching poem you've written. Did I detect a hint of sadness near the end there? For the most part, this is pretty solid. It packs a lot of emotion, and feels like a line of thought that a poet would probably have. However, I do have a few things to point out.

First of, the line "Her hair was long and soft, and bright eyes." is a fragment, and detracts from the impact of the piece. Some rewording would resolve this issue.

And secondly (this one is a very small thing); :Sometimes, I wander off to places that reminds me of you." Because you wrote places (plural), reminds should be remind. That's just a small thing, but I'm going for an Secondary Education degree in English, so I see this very often.

Other than those two things, great job. Keep on writing strong, emotive pieces! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

Hey Dan,
Thank you for reading and taking your time to review this one. And thank you for cor.. read more
DoormanDan

7 Years Ago

Anytime. :)
This flows so smoothly. It captured the love and longing so beautifully. Readers can feel the depth of that emotion. Bravo...so romantic ... loved it

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Ellen! I really appreciate it :)
Very descriptive and romantic. He is lucky to have you. May your bond and connection grow deeper by age...:)...............

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Sami! :)
Sami Khalil

7 Years Ago

You are welcome. ...::::))))
what stunning lines! brilliant work, wow! the first leaf to fall in autumn

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Andrew!
I like this .very lovely piece.You are fortunate to have such a way with words.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Jade! :) You are fortunate as well!

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