Make a Wish

Make a Wish

A Poem by Gullia King

There's something hauntingly beautiful about the way she carries herself. 
Even if her heart is shattered in a million pieces, 
she's always mindful of the type of energy she surrounds herself with. 
And I am forever jealous of her relationship with the starry sky. 
. . . 
You.  
Her deep dark eyes searched for his. 
"You take me to places, I've never known before. 
How did you know my favorite thing is star gazing?" She asked. 
"I knew it, simply by the way your eyes light up when the sun goes down. 
No one fancies the darkness as much as you do."  
"It's not darkness to me", she says with a frown on her face. 
"There's something magical about the stars in the velvety sky."  
"What's so magical about it?" He asks. 
"You can close your eyes and make a wish and it will come true."  
"Do you trust me?"
"Always," he says. 
As she reaches out her hand to him she says,
"Close your eyes, make a wish and think of me."  
He takes her hand, 
closes his eyes 
and makes his last wish.



© 2017 Gullia King



Author's Note

Gullia King
I hope you're not bored with my poems about stars. Enjoy. x

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Very well done. I enjoyed reading it. :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


Gullia King

8 Months Ago

Thank you for reading :)
Can you imagine how many stars are out there? Count the numerous stars from the balcony of your home? And you wish to find them all? Take a journey of unlitimed adventure, where you become ageless. Yes, the stars go on and on as we waste the precious moments they wish to have,

but breath

slow,

deep,

and let it all out.

Yes, thats exactly what it felt like!

Never stop writing about the immense galaxy. xx

Posted 8 Months Ago


Gullia King

8 Months Ago

Wow, this is a lovely review! Thank you so much :) xx
"I knew it, simply by the way your eyes light up when the sun goes down." That's my favorite. Thanks.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Gullia King

8 Months Ago

Thank you, Matt! :)
this is so sweet. love, togetherness and those ever enchanting, mystical stars. man has been fascinated with the stars since the beginning of time. so much romancing takes place in their presence. they are like eyes in the sky! cool title. great job. really enjoyed this. :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


Gullia King

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Pete! I'm happy you liked this one! :)
A beautiful and very romantic poem devoid of cliches. The dialogue is very appropriately romantic and sweet, not resorting to sex and/or lust but instead an ode to true love between two people who just want to connect on an emotional level.

No, I'm not bored with the theme and visuals of stars as they make the poem much more poignant.
I also liked the dialogue, innocently sweet it was.

;)

Posted 8 Months Ago


Gullia King

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Kevin :) I'm happy you're not bored!
Either he got her or he asked for a kiss and she gave it to him, in surprise he died of pleasure. Valentine

Posted 8 Months Ago


Gullia King

8 Months Ago

As I was writing the poem I thought that when he made his last wish, that he died. Maybe they're spe.. read more
I like this line esp .. 'the way your eyes light up when the sun goes down' .. and the hint of menace in the sign off.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Gullia King

8 Months Ago

I'm happy you like it RJ :)
Very beautiful:)
Make a wish..

Posted 8 Months Ago


Gullia King

8 Months Ago

Thank you :)


I'm not bored with poems about stars.not bored at all with poems about the stars at all.
I love the sentiment in this - his first wish on the stars was his last because she was everything he coud wish for...that's pure romance right there.
Stargazing is one of my favourite things to do. As a kid, I used to feel a yearning to them when I viewed them. Like ET - lol - "come back and get me, you forgot about me here." lol
A beautiful write Gullia!


Posted 8 Months Ago


Gullia King

8 Months Ago

I'm happy you're not bored with me, TJ! Lol I would do the same thing! I still do. Kinda in the mood.. read more
Tony Jordan

8 Months Ago

Oh the river scene - when he's grey and laying there...gets me every time - no seriously...gets me E.. read more
Gullia King

8 Months Ago

Omg that scene gets me too! I'm always crying my eyes out lol.
I don't know but you never kn.. read more
To me, it feels as if the stars mock us, blinking down, smiling mockingly, making fun while I blink back tears... To some yes it seems magical but I've always felt my wishes never even reached the stars let alone been heard.....


"You can close your eyes and make a wish and it will come true."
These are the only lines I don't agree with but I do not deny the beauty of your words, for they are mesmerizing..

Sorry for giving such a lousy review, Gullia! Your words definitely had an impact on me, more than I liked..

And I know I'm not bored of your starry poems! 😉 keep going the way you're going ☺👍


Posted 8 Months Ago


Gullia King

8 Months Ago

Wow, Yumna this is an amazing review. Not lousy at all! :) I really like the first thing you wrote. .. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Same here! Feels as if we definitely have a purpose of living now, right? 😛
You're welcom.. read more
Gullia King

8 Months Ago

Exactly! I'm happy we've found our purpose at such young age lol. :)

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