My Demons

Why can't I let my demons go?

I'm forever married to the darkness.

I keep screaming into my pillow,

hoping that I'll disappear into thin air.

I light another cigarette,

hoping the smoke will choke me, 

knowing that with every new cigarette, 

I'll be closer to the darkness.

Closer to you.

We all might have something that keeps us wide awake at night, 

keeps our thoughts running wild.

Words are like knives on my skin, slowly cutting me up.

I realize, not every story has a happy ending. 

I can feel him waiting for me.

His eyes are on me.

Sucking me into his embrace.

I can feel him in my bloodstream.

I can't breathe.

He's here,

he's come out to play. 

Author's Note

Something different. A work in progress.
*Congratulations!
Your poem My Demons has been awarded First in the What Are Your Secrets? writing contest.*

Reviews

[Michael G. Smith]

A very intensity is conveyed here. When you mention work in progress what to is you refer? I we reading the raw version and is there more rewrite in store? I have a very curious nature, lol.

[Giulia King]

It's a work in progress because I'm thinking about making it a bit longer. And this is my first time writing about something different. All my poems are about love, letting go.. This one is a bit darker lol.

[Michael G. Smith]

So I'm anticipating My Demons Again the sequel. Because you know they never go away. The best we can do is push them down deeper, build higher and thicker walls so they are less likely to escape.

[R J Askew]

It's true re happy endings. I like 'words are like knives on my skin' and the sense of foreboding, mixed with what feels like a willingness to get on with things.

[Giulia King]

Thank you, RJ! :)

[Lovecraft]

Something different in a very good way. Provocatively dark and an accurate portrayal of certain addictions. Sounds like the narrator is going through withdrawal. It's actually quite good with its relative intensity and the ending is nearly perfect.

Whether this is about heroin, cigarettes, alcohol, etc, it's a well-written poem about the "Demons" of substance abuse.

A very effective and somewhat bleak poem.
Nice work, King! :)

[Giulia King]

I'm so happy you like it! Although, I don't think I'll ever be as good as you. Your dark poems are amazing. :)

[Lovecraft]

Thank you! ;)

You may be correct, but your Love poems are far better than mine. I excel in Darkness. ;)

You should just write several very dark poems and then you'd improve in that specific area. But some people can't because their mind isn't that dark.

You have much potential, Padawan... ;)

[Writing Angel]

ve how deep it is as well as how it is full of that dark theme, you write very well with it.... you should continue great job

[Giulia King]

Thank you! Maybe I will :)

[Farhan Shaikh]

That's really good work, interesting..

[Giulia King]

Thank you.

[Kesha]

A very dark piece coming from you, we all have demons that no matter how hard and fast we run, we can't escape them. This was nicely done and I loved the flow and format. :)

[Giulia King]

Thank you so much for reading :)

[Kesha]

You are welcome :)

[sinNsincerity]

light another cigarette,
hoping the smoke will choke me
Very much so.

[Giulia King]

Thank you for reading

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"We all might have something that keeps us wide awake at night,
keeps our thoughts running wild."

I think this is the darkest of your poems that I've read up till now. I agree, we all have something which keeps us awake..

I like the phrase 'married to the darkness' it's like either you've accepted the ever present darkness in your life or else in a forced relationship with it..

This had me thinking many things. I can so relate. Deep write, Gullia! You know I love your work 😊

[Giulia King]

Yes, it's the darkest one. Thank you so much, Yumna! I'm happy I'm not alone in the darkness haha. I appreciate your review :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, Gullia! Always a pleasure 😊

[boygene borice]

Beautiful. I wanted more of it...does it have a continuation?

[Giulia King]

Thank you! I don't know yet..

[aLittlePain]

This is quite delicious the way the darkness seeps and wraps around you. We all have them, entertain them, sometimes facing them reveals something entirely different.
Nicely done G. R xo

[Giulia King]

So true! Thank you for reading, lovely :) xo