Devilish

Devilish

A Poem by Giullia King

"Come on!" 
Said the boy with the gorgeous looks and devilish smile.
"What could possibly go wrong?" 
- Everythingshe thought. 
"Nothing" she blurted out, and went lost into her own world. 
"I've been trying to hold onto days," he said, "because sometimes the nights get too dark for me,
So," he said, once again, "come with me."
He was a living, breathing, dangerous poetry.
He was the only one that could rip my heart out of my beating chest and ignite a spark.
Then a flame.

We were the constellations, 
The stars that shine so brightly,
The moonlit sky in the darkest of nights. 
Not knowing what this dark night had to offer, 
She took his hand and felt the storm within her suddenly go quiet. 
"Ready?" 



© 2017 Giullia King



Author's Note

Giullia King
Not my best piece. Just some words I had to get out of my head. Will edit it more in the future. x

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He was the only one that could rip my heart out of my beating chest and ignite a spark.
Then a flame.

mmmmm before we know it we are walking the path of darkness, towards the edge of destruction is feels like , the storms waiting to unleash its fury on us, but we walk as if under the spells of the stars calling us to go on walk rite into the eye of the storm.... :)

i really liked this one ..


Posted 5 Months Ago


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Giullia King

1 Month Ago

I'm happy you liked this one :) Thanks for reading



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Pretty good for “Just some words I had to get out of my head”. I quite enjoyed the figurative language you used here, and the image at the bottom of the writing is quite fitting overall. My only recommendations are going through this for grammatical errors and whatnot. Things such as “ He was a living, breathing, dangerous poetry” should be “He was living, breathing, dangerous poetry.

Other than that, I have nothing to really criticize here. This piece isn’t striking any groundbreaking terrain in terms of lyricism, but you still manage to paint an atmosphere of love (perhaps young love is accurate?) and the strength it can give to people in the face of incoming hardship. Overall, great piece!!

Posted 1 Week Ago


That angst and excitement of that one person that makes your heart swell and the position of going out on a limb with unbridled lust and adoration as justification. Oh those are the days. Loved this!!!

Posted 1 Week Ago


Now we need to know, did he rip her heart out.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Zoe
Devilish indeed. Certainly leaves me wanting for more. That picture though...really fetching.
Loved the write!

Posted 1 Month Ago


This really draws me in and you have a great structure put together really well.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Giullia King

1 Month Ago

Thank you, Fatima :) I really like your name.
Fatima

1 Month Ago

Awh thanks that's really sweet . Yours toox
Nice little moment to read.overwhelmed with anticipation.I like the build up in anxiety in the female character. Well done

Posted 4 Months Ago


Giullia King

1 Month Ago

Thank you, KC! :))
Well put together. I enjoy this as if I stood in the midst of the scene.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Giullia King

1 Month Ago

I'm happy you could visualize it :) Thank you for reading
That picture fits the poem magnificently. I like the idea that she takes a chance on the unknown while knowing very well it could end up as a disaster.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Giullia King

1 Month Ago

Exactly! Thank you for reading :))
I liked this, I thought it was a really good write.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Giullia King

1 Month Ago

I'm happy you liked my poem :)
There is something quite magical in all of your writings.. It draws me in. And I believe we both share the same love for stars and the sky..
"He was a living, breathing, dangerous poetry."
This line is simply beautiful and haunting.
You are capable of a lot and one day I hope I become as good as you are..

Posted 5 Months Ago


Giullia King

1 Month Ago

Oh, wow. A million thanks for this amazing review! I'm so happy you like my poems. This review truly.. read more

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