Space

when she leaves

Nothing around me matters,

if you aren't within my arms reach.

Panic and confusion blankets my world

as space between you and I deepens;

the walls of a normal room warp awkwardly

when you aren't in it.

Outside becomes a void of emptiness---

morning, afternoon, and night...

all just generic copies of redundancy.

The space that divides you and I

consumes even myself... now lost,

swimming or drowning I can't tell.

This space tortures,

because there's no room for death.

Come back close and bring back with you normality,

and make this space make sense again.

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Ah that overwhelming insane feeling when part of us is missing.

generic copies of redundancy....killer line Travis!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Frieda... it's my favorite line of the piece.

[Frieda P]

We have grand taste so. ;-) My pleasure....

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

I would have to agree. ;)

[Frieda P]

Must be a joisey thang ;-)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Now, you know I wouldn't disagree. Lol

[Rod Dangers]

So many awesome lines in this i cant choose a favourite.
I love poems than end strongly, so i would have to say the closing four lines were superb.
Thank you for sharing.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, your thoughts are humbling.

[NebraskaHope]

This was amazing very deep and intellectual !

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, i appreicate you stopping to leave such a great review.

[Renée]

Oh you captured that part of love brilliantly ! when everything is upside down and sideways all at the same time !

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you... I'm glad I was able to achieve that. I appreciate the kind words.

[Renée]

A pleasure ( :

[Sami Khalil]

"panic and confusion blankets my world

as space between you and I deepens

the walls of a normal room warp awkwardly"
That is what you call good poetry...:)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thanks, bro... it means a lot.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)

[quinfinn]

"generic copies of redundancy" is a superb line...this whole piece speaks to me like an old friend, and you have some very clever wordplay going on throughout....i would definitely ask my friends here to read your poetry....nice!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you very much, i'm glad the piece was able to reach you in such a way. i appreciate the support, i will be sure to return the favor.

[Rogue]

It amazes me how I know your words.. The feeling in them. In this piece it is not my side of a story, but the side of another I hear. Someone who loved me more than I knew was possible before...

Felt this one completely.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

I'm glad you felt them. Love like that defines the human experience, I'm thankful my words were able to convey the emotion accurately. As always Rogue, I'm humbled by your enjoyment.

[Rogue]

A pleasure to read you. Always, your words seem to strike a note within.
I'd very much like to see you get reviewed more. You have something to say and it should be read. Hmmm.. -thinking-