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A poem that I wrote a long time ago early one morning. I just woke up out of a dream and started writing. Dont ask me what it means I cant remember. Come up with ur own conclusion

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1.I am just a soul

My abilities are

To feel

To love

To be felt

To be loved

But in order for my existence to be

 

2.I must have a home

You know know the one with

Blood

Veins

Flesh

Bones?

...And the heart...

Aahh the heart

My ever loyal Sahabah

Its color more red than tufah

Love more sweet than Zaatar

Texture more soft than halaweyaat

Yet more delicate than flakes of fattirah

Content content

My dwelling is full of contentment

But -- again

 

3.I must have a fence

If it were my choice to choose

Eyes color Almond

Hair color Plum

Skin color Pecan

Lips color Rum

No, He chose for me

Hazel

Black

Pale

Red

This He chose instead

Alaaaahu Akbar!!!!

Now I am complete

Now I am content

Look how my Creator created this!

Now I can rest

No?

But yet again

 

4.Now I must meet my neighbor

Just one

The one to my right or to my right or to my right?

Or the one to my left or to my left or to my left?

I'm exhausted now Ive knocked on every door

But I haven't found a single soul

That mirrors my very own

Author's Note

tell me what u think!

Reviews

[talibislam]

As-Salaamu alaikum wa rahmatullahi wa barakatuh,

How are you today? Insha Allah, you are doing well. I read this poem on muslimspace, yet I keep coming back to it.
I really, really like it. I can identify with what is being said. Having know love once before, I know how precious it can be. But it is like a fire, so beautiful and full of life, yet you must be careful. If you are not, it will burn you.
Everytime I read this I come to the last two lines and I think about an old couple, sitting together on a porch swing. Just sitting. Content to just BE together, no words necessary, because they know the depth of the love that the other feels. Love so deep that if one of them should pass on to the grave, the other will soon follow.
I also get feelings like I am getting a quick glimpse into who you are, yet I don't know if it is an accurate portrait.
I could go on, but I think I have said enough. It was a very good poem and it truly is one of my favorites.
Ma Salaama.

[The realest]

Honestly the last line is nuts really really great have not found a soul to mirror my own is beautiful

the flow of the poem was great for me too the use of the other language gave the poem more meaning

honestly I was thrown off as far as tempo and mood because the color of the font you choose to use really did not give off the love vibe but in a way it added to the poem.

great job

[Hope]

I think this poem is really descriptive, the use of other languages gives it a whole deeper feeling than just in English, the use of imagery of you being exhausted and trying to push yourself in every direction, that was portrayed amazingly!! :D

[David]

Amazing. I love the third stanza, so true, only what Allah has created us. The flow is awesome. Great piece.

[kurrupted]

peace be upon you and your entire household...by ALLAH believe me you are a great writer and this is a great piece( haza jamil jiddan).the type that keeps one going over the lines over and over again,i love the flow its well connected...the fourth stanza is rather reaveling heheheheh! dont mind me. all in all it is a great piece.
weldone......masalam