A Scenery (Before & After)

Sometimes your life can be hectic and sometimes the only way to solve that is to get away for awhile or forever. This is how I feel before and after I get away.

Before I felt so

Sad inside

Before I felt so

Very alone

Before that, I felt

Undeserved,unloved

Before that, I felt

pressured, stressed

Before that scenery

This is how I felt

 

A scenery

A scenery changes everything

Now the breeze blows away the sadness

And the crickets sing a song

Now the sand is as warm as love

And the water cools away the heat of stress

Now the moon shines

And quietly listens to everything being said

Reviews

[The realest]

Really good read for me too the content description worked really well in this poem

I really really did not like transition from the first stanza to the second kinda killed the tempo for me.

other than that the two stanzas independent are inspiring and beautiful

[Hope]

WOW! This has such depth to it, you protrayed hope in such an inspiring way, the use of beautiful scenery gave you the hope and the inspiration to live somewhere else and to help you live a different life. Awesome write, you have a lot of talent, Keep it up :)

[wizthom]

when you take the reader and make him apart of the story,
then my love as a writer u done justice..i felt the pain ,
of the rain washing the sadness away..love it.peace wizthom

[talibislam]

I can identify with the emotions that this brings forth. It reminds me of relaxing on the beach at night after many weeks of very hard work. Thank you.

[kurrupted]

wow!(nodding) this is a nice piece well put.simple yet powerful.thankx for this one.