Tears

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You left me standing there,

In the pouring rain,

With nothing to think about,

Except of how I lost you.

The rain soaks me to the bone,

On my way home,

I think of the times we shared,

The times we laughed,

When I cried how you held me close to you,

Now that's gone, Your gone, We're done.

I'll probably never see you again,

I just want to say I'm sorry,

That I love you but I'm willing to let you go.

Lucky for me it's raining,

No one will see the tears I cry.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Caradoc]

A sad poem that seems like it is a personal life experience. I myself have never had to walk home alone, crying in the rain. For that I am somewhat thankful. However I have known the heartache of losing someone I loved, or thought I loved anyway. Depending on the person and the nature of the relationship the pain either will remain or, if you're lucky, be healed by the love of someone you deserve.

Thankfully I have found that someone. I hope you will as well someday soon. Because this poem tells me you have a pretty soul and a budding talent as a poet.

One thing you missed though. In your last sentence it appears that you forgot to put the word "one" after "no". A minor mistake that fails to detract from the simple honesty and emotion of this poem.

Nice write.

[Maya Jane]

The last two lines of this poem got me. It's strong and powerful.

[Linds]

This is such an interesting one.

[paradise]

I Love this poem It has so much emotion in it. I likehow you brought in the part of the "p�™uring rain" It is a great way to start a poem and it has alot of meaning behind it. I also enjpoyed how you brought in all the pain thatyou feel after these things happen how the memories are brought back. And the last two lines really bring it together " Lucky for me it's raining,
No one will see the tears I cry." It is a great way to end it and really brings it all together :)

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This is really beuatiful, so much emotion in this write.
Very nicely written!

[Crystal Marie Rome]

Very, very beautiful!!! I loved it so much, you can really feel the emotion in it. Loved it and see you at school =). Do your best! =)