Forgiveness

A formal speech to a sombre crowd,
a joke and a laugh between two friends.
A cool complaint from a person proud,
a comfy chat that has to end.

A cruel remark from the mouth of a child,
a clumsy lie from an honest soul.
A whispered curse from one so mild,
a poisoned smile, a quick eye roll.

A twisted gut and pinched insides,
salt water grin and hands clenched tight.
A sentence tripping, falling, hides
behind dry mouths and wet eyesight.

A poor defense that tumbles free,
a red faced sigh that aches regret.
A stupid, thinly veiled plea,
The turn away which means "not yet."

A trembling hand, a sweaty brow,
a wince at what you think you've heard.
A messy hug, a hasty vow,
a quick relief upon the word.

Reviews

[Wasekera S Chiphazi Ban..]

very captivating poem.. Love your style of writin -- lookin forward to reading more of your work

[alf]

Hi Epicness. This is another great read. not so much a story, but the words have an easy flow and slide from the page with a great cadence. So loved this. am now awaiting your next poem, alf

[Epicness]

Thanks alf, glad you liked it :)

[~]

What a myriad of feelings you evoke with each line. Each of them, allowing the reader to identify with a time, or with an example of when they felt forgiven, or when they had to be apologetic. Forgiveness does bring releasing feelings. I liked that the poem rhymed. It adds to the tempo of the message.
(p.s. strangely enough, I feel I have read you before..it's got to be just my imagination, since this is your first poem :)

[Epicness]

Thanks for reading Moonskittles and glad you enjoyed it :)

(Re ps: Huh, that's pretty cool )

[~]

p.p.s. :) keep writing :)

[Valentine]

A very good and interesting write. Valentine

[Epicness]

Thank you :)

[Warren Daniel II]

Excellently written! This is my favorite stanza "A cruel remark from the mouth of a child,
a clumsy lie from an honest soul.
A whispered curse from one so mild,
a poisoned smile, a quick eye roll."
It is brilliantly written, can't wait for your next poem, great job.

[Epicness]

Thank you so much for reading, glad you liked it :)