Lyric poem

Sometimes you have to change,

become better than you once were,

to go back home and show what you've become,

but why turn back now?

May yet you feel trapped,

a victim of venomous fate,

drifting away to feel

a little less insane.

We are all born creatures free,

leave and return not.

For if it is pre-ordained

does any of it actually matter?

Reviews

[sonna]

I agree, some times you do have to change to better youself. Ilkie this poem i thought that the the poem was great and truethful.

[Meghan]

Very good! You did a good job at expressing a deep meaning with your choice of lyrics. My favorite was your last stanza, i like how you ended it with "does any of it actually matter?"

[Lila Baumann]

You can't tell this poem was composed with lyrics from different songs because it contains a wholesome idea. Which I like. Good job.

[Niall Madden]

Good intro the first two lines got me hooked, the line "victim of venomous fate" had a very good sound to it the alliteration put extra emphasis on the idea of venom. Although I feel that the last line could have been developed a bit more as it sounds a bit jagged. Overall good