Within Beauty

Within beauty the meadowlark

    Laments to the field of blond, 

For past a singing of the sun

    Is serenity to the sets of beyond. 

In the meadow he cries

    Upon wings of rolling distance,

For the golden ground he dwells 

    Amid heaven’s incandescence.

Within beauty the meadowlark

    Upon rolling wings flies

To the singing sets through hills beyond

    In glorious, baying skies. 

Reviews

[Derek S.Keck]

This is interesting. You create a duality between this beautiful, almost angelic scene and then contrast it with the laments of a bird. I like the term laments too, it signifies, to me, that ultimate personal suffering. I took a whole semester last spring studying the bible from a literary standpoint, and I think...it was in Psalms(maybe?)… where you had the songs of lament. There was such desperation in the laments, like a call to the father was the last rational option they had, nothing earthly could save them from their personal struggle.

This poem took me to a moment when I was sitting here, on my computer, back when the violence first broke out in Lebanon. I was on CNN.com reading an article about the uprising and all of the civilian casualties, then all of a sudden my Pandora started playing a "wonderful world" and I just got the weirdest feeling. I appreciate your poetry; you have your own voice and your own poetic eyes. I’m going to let this piece simmer in my head a while. Cheers! Happy Turkey Day!

[The Cobra Lounge]

this fits my current mood....ethereal...and illuminating. When reading this...I want to linger in that moment forever...its pure magic...I love the fantasy. x
100/100

Muse

[Melati]

How beautiful!

[Mark D]

You are such a beautiful writer. Enjoyed the flow and excellent words. Thank you

[Craig Froman]

I love how you take such an image from nature and breathe a flame into it so we all can see vividly through your eyes... Please don't ever stop writing... your were born for such a time as this...

[dreaming dame]

Beautiful. Funny, I love how you used blond, but I would never have thought of that. :)

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Beautiful imagery. Stunning piece.

[Abdul Aziz]

Your diction, cadence, and use of appropriate poetic devices astound me. Thank you for elucidating the joys of rhyme and rhythm with such a mellifluous poem. I think most reviews have already pointed out the absolute beauty of this work. The contradistinction, the duality, the complex nature of the personification all lend hands to mould this very memorable poem. 100/100 if you ask me, and going in my library!

[WhiteWillow]

Beautiful words, beautiful picture you paint. A lovely piece.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Painted pictures abound here. Storytelling in poetic form ay it's finest.
Very nice work.

[Art]

majestic would be if we were the meadowlark viewing the same beauty ...nice flow of poetic thoughts Haley...