I am the Atheist of Spring

I am the atheist of spring

     I fled Her

     And She fled me

  

     Like Her nightly passes 

     Over doors brushed with lamb’s blood

     She chants “Judas, Judas”

     Looks for a son

(Does Her cross lie in a bed of blossoms?

  It is hidden just as I)

     I paint my tendril arms in poppies 

     As the lamb for Her slaughter

     She pauses

     “Bring life to this one

      For she is more dead than my brother”

Reviews

[Nautili]

oh my....very interesting. Spring and her promises of new life (and love perhaps) has betrayed you and left you an unbeliever in her charms. I love the last lines denoting that you are more dead than winter, that is so powerful!
It makes you wonder about her cross hidden in the flowers....for those who do not feel her rejuvenation powers, it could be that-the pain of not feeling more alive in the Springtime. But still, you paint your arms as poppies, so hope rests at the bottom of your well. There is a depth to this poem that really merits much thought. I loved it.

[TamiViolet]

This is superb writing... Powerful and enduring... Poetic technique is absolutely brilliant!!! I'm not on these days but was compelled to comment on this piece.... for its echo is heard long after the words are read...

[Swapz747]

Conceptual poem. Brilliant .. :-)

[Craig Froman]

Your words pierce and strike, leaving haunted thoughts of ancient symbols born to die... An amazing voice whispers on the wind, calling for the firstborn... clinging to the darkness and death of winter... not wanting the resurrection of spring...

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A beautiful read, a most thoughful process, well done, good read.

[David]

That's just amazing,it's unbelievable.And it's got incredible style,even the structure has visible appeal from the get go.

[Elisa Laura]

I love the contradictions, well played out here. Beautiful Hayley, as I am an Atheist. And believe in Science of the Universe. Thank you. Well done!

[Kenneth S.]

Atheist or not, this is awesome!

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Stunning work...gave me chills.
Twisted and beautiful.

[Neva Flores - Changeful..]

I paint my tendril arms in poppies.........fascinating piece Hayley. Bravo!

[Raven Starhawk]

Truly a remarkable feast for these eyes to devour. I loved it.