Lip-Locked

Something short to capture a brief moment that i can't get out of my head. New try on structure hope it works.

My mind is locked in a feverish kiss,

That could shatter all the ages:

The gentle spring of life I tasted,

And from this world I soon vacated,

Now it shall echo through my cavernous being,

And be the only thing sustained.

Reviews

[miSS LEaf]

cavernous, i wrote a poem with that title :)
this is different, fresh, i like

~L~

[Breezie Kae]

Very simple, but I like it. :)