A Mother's Passing

Simple words on the passing and mourning process of a mother. 4th anniversary, on 9th April, of mum toodling off to get some well deserved pain free peace.

Wash every face with mournful tears
let solemn silence fill all ears,
have time stand still to mark the day
a mother died, passed away.

Draw a veil across the sun
inform the birds no song be sung,
bow down all heads in silent prayer
for she is gone, no longer there.

Let choirs of angels sing their love
and carry high her soul above,
then cherubs tend and for her care
until the time to join her there.

Dry every face of mournful tears
may celebration fill all ears,
remove the world from mute and pause
each broken heart beat out applause.

Unveil the sun tell all birds sing
rejoice in what all mothers bring,
a love unbounded, true and deep
eternally in each heart to keep.

Author's Note

This was read at my own mother's funeral

Reviews

[ANTO]

"let solemn silence fill all ears, .." - class image here - absolute nothingness filling the voids - very apt for this write.

i like the way the whole write swings around this fulcrum
"Let choirs of angels sing their love,
and carry high her soul above,
then cherubs tend and for her care,
until the time to join her there. " - as a fulcrum its quite stunning and clever word arranging too.

The fourth stanza reminded me of the New Orleans style funerals with the jazz bands accompanying - a fine celebratory verse - of a life well lived.
The end stanza brings us back to serene poignancy and allows the reader to carry on but with a new memory in our hearts forever.
Its a very well penned memorial Gee. Really... sound as...
:))

[Gee]

Thanks Anto,nice to get your seal of approval,B...............

[Peggy-Lou]

WOW!
Thank you for reviewing my poem about my mom's death...
This poem of yours is beautiful - bitter sweet

[Gee]

Thank you,take care

[Indra Neil]

a poignant and powerful write with superbly crafted rhyme flow! bravo!

[Gee]

Thank you kindly

[Indra Neil]

u r welcome!

[Cherry Pepperweb]

That is a very beautiful poem Gee.
A mother's passing should be mourned but also be a celebration of her life.

[Gee]

Thank you Cherry......

[Cherry Pepperweb]

You're welcome Gee.

[Relic]

This has the mark of a professional writer to me. I like the 8 syllable count for most of the lines which kept a good meter to move with and you didn't stray from the main theme, (the mother). Your word choice was great and the spots of alliteration and assonance made it flow like a mournful stream.

Your re-working really paid off on this.

[Gee]

I'm flattered,perhaps more shocked you would say this,cheers.Just a simple man who likes a rhyme.

[Woody]

goddamn it Gee!! I thought you were just another joker. this is absolutely amazing. I doubt very much anyone can top this one up. wheew!! just wonderful.

[Gee]

Cheers Woody,I had a sensible day whilst writing this,doesn't happen to often mind!!!

[Asante]

Wow...I really do like this poem...Nobody wants to witness the person who brought into the world leave it but...We all have to go through it...Once again Great poem

[Gee]

Thank you very much

[~]

Ohhh my dear friend. This is a masterpiece of a tribute to that one person in our life that means more than anything else. The immaculate transition from weeping to singing is done very artfully. Wow!! I am utterly impressed! I love that last stanza. Such bright imagery, and verses that really talk directly to the heart. All verbs and what-not are perfectly stitched together.

P.S. Sorry Gee for taking this long to review this .. but here I am :)

[Gee]

Hi Miss D,thank you so much.Got to say this is my own favourite,but I sometimes doubt what I have written,probably due to my iffy education.Thanks for putting my tiny mind to rest,you're very kind.Hoe all's well on the home front and the patriarch has fully recovered.Enjoy the rest of your evening/night and thank you again.Take care.(Masterpiece,I think I will frame that,lol)

[~]

well, shakespeare did not go to college yet his work is the second most quoted after the Bible - you do have talent!!!

[Gee]

I'll frame that as well.You're very kind.Take care.

[~]

you too, and watch out for those thumbs :)

[Gee]

LOL,will do.

[Miyana Sparks]

This is amazing. Usually, poems don't really make me cry, but this one brought a tear to my eye.
Beautiful poem.

[Gee]

Oops,thanks Miyana

[sereenaoutloud]

Great write
I never want to know the pain of loosing my mother, even though it is inevitable i hope to stay forever in denial!
I declare you have to give me a funny poem now as that is twice your beautiful writing has brought a tear to my eye lol

[Gee]

I know what you mean,mine is 77years old now and brought 7 of us up on her lonesome, then adopted my niece and nephew when my sister wanted to give them up.Some woman!!Apologies for any sadness,I'm the complete opposite,carefree and slightly nuts.

[Gee]

Sorry,thanks for the review,always received with thanks."His first and last slow dance ,a disaster"might(or not) make you Twitter.

[Gee]

Twitter!!!!sorry my little Scottish Golden Eagle,I meant titter!!!