Give me to the summer breeze

One final walk together An oldie updated 28/02/20

It's time my love you lived again
removed the widow's black,
leave sorrow for all yesterday's
invite happiness "come back"

So don a dress of pastel hues
paint a smile upon your face,
walk me for a last time dear
to my final resting place.

Take me to the highest hill
give me to the summer breeze,
to gently fall on lush green grass
'neath the shade of aged trees.

Then take your leave, live again
let another share your heart,
as I will love for eternity,
we will never truly part.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

This is very solemn! It really upped the ante on its power once I realized the voice was actually that of a deceased - "removed the widow's black" I merely thought some poetic brilliance, but it wasn't until "walk me for a ......final resting place" that I realized Holy kwap! It's a dead loved one talking about saying goodbye and moving on to be happy! Fantastic! I only have a problem with understanding the first lines of the last two stanzas. I know what they're trying to say, but the wording is a bit awkward. Other than that, this is most deservedly praiseworthy. Well done!

[Gee]

Cheers. Like all of my scribblings this needs tidying up. Perhaps I'll get round to it when away in a few weeks time. It's nice to have honest feedback, thank you

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Brought me to tears. I didn't expect the power of this Gee. Emotions! Classically elegant in form and rhyme-"Take me to the highest hill, give me to the summers breeze" - beautiful and heart-breaking words... "But promise that you'll leave me with a smile and soft blown kiss". Can't laud this enough. Thank you.

[Gee]

Thanks Annette, I'm glad you enjoyed this one

[BBP]

I read this again and you almost pulled tears. This was so flawlessly beautiful and heartfelt. One of my all time favorite reads.

[Gee]

I'm flattered. Goes to prove even us folk lacking qualifications can string a few decent sentences together. Cheers I'm chuffed

[BBP]

hahah I got no qualifications and I just piece together chaos..... I think just being able to type is qualification enough. lol

[Gee]

Guess so. Again thanks

[BBP]

LOL..... even if this was the only piece of your's I ever read, I would say you are over qualified.

[Gee]

You missed the UNDER...

[BBP]

LMAO! That would only be used if I was talking about myself lol

[_mal]

You do what you can to get through and then one day the steps gets a little easier. Nice to think of your loved one walking you through this difficult act

[Gee]

Again thank you

[_mal]

Sorry if all the reviews are a bit awkward, you don't have to reply to me, I'll just quietly browse :)

[Gee]

Lol, not at all. It is always nice to be read and commented on, good or bad

[emmajoy]

A beautiful sadness. True Love never dies, it merely rests, gently wrapped in sweet memories.

Sigh.

[Gee]

Thanks Emma. One of the rare occasions when my pen was behaving. Hope all is well, we're heading your way, Bath, for a couple of days. Please tell the sun to show itself

[emmajoy]

Pausing.. to look Bath-way... could.. just... be.. brighter.. er.. um.. than was. You could be lucky. Listen to the traffic news however, lots going on down this 'ere way, plus, just to be awkward, 'they' do road repairs non stop this time of year, here and there, there.. and dear goodness.. over there! Enjoy yourself, come what may. :)

[emmajoy]

Should delete this, or will you, seems very flippant under your beautiful writing? .

[Gee]

It's fine where it is

[Coyote Poetry]

Gentle and wonderful use of words and thoughts.
"No tears my love, enough are shed,
lighten your heavy heart,
for although I'm now, not at your side,
we'll never be apart. "
The above lines I liked. I liked the tone of the poem. You left the reader with place and thoughts to ponder. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Gee]

Cheers Coyote, appreciate your kind words

[Coyote Poetry]

Cheers back to you my friend and I hope you are enjoying the days of Spring.

[Gee]

I am indeed. Have just put "she who must be obeyed " to work cleaning the car and I'm off to sit on a rowing machine to expend some energy

[Cherrie Palmer]

very elegant with a gentle leading cadence

[Gee]

Thank you..

[Kathrin S]

What a wonderful poem, I really love the sentiment expressed here, and the way you explored it.

Here are two details I noticed:

widow(')s black

"lighten, your heavy heart" - do you really need a comma there?

[Gee]

Glad you liked Katherine, I will edit accordingly. Thank you

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Tenderness here Gee, letting go is hard this is a lovely expression. I'm struggling with this at the minute. Beautiful write. Starz

[Gee]

Thanks Starz. I'll give life a call and tell it to sort you out. Sorry to read of your woes

[BBP]

Beautiful take on letting go and holding on. Beautifully balanced Gee.

[Gee]

Thank you Bev. Only one of two I've ever taken a little time over .

[BBP]

It shows... It's thought out and very beautifully put together

[Gee]

Thank you...